what do you think of my poems?

Question

ok first before you read them they may not rhyme but what do you guys and gals think of them ps dont mind the spelling.


1.REMBER ME NOT
I dont want you to rember me but i will always rember you.rember me not! i cant take you rembering mewhen you dont even care about me. for if you rember me your just going to hurt me again. good bye forever. REMBER ME NOT!!.

2.THE COLOR BALCK
the color balck is what i see when im sitting in the dark. the color black is the color i see when you hurt me.the color balckis what im wearing when you saud i lied. the color balck is what i see when im no longer here on earth.

4. WHITE
white so pure. white is a pure color that only a angel will wear. white is what i wear. for because im the angel. angels wear white because their so pure. white is the color of angels.

5.STARS
satrs are the eyes of the loved ones gone. tonight there will be another star in the sky. stars are he eyes of lost ones. looking apon their loved ones.i

i will be the new star. i will shine very bright. so brightthat only evey eye is one me. but then the light will die for my spirit drifted away when i saw my family and friends weeping at my grave. but i know im in a better place and i can always keep watch over them.

if you would like more poems email me these are just 5 out of 20.

Answer 1

GOOD!

Keep working to express yourself through your poetry and other written work.

Poetry does not have to rhyme to be poetry. There are many poetic styles.

Know that poems you share online may be stolen, it's just not wise, so be careful. If you want to share online, if you can afford to Copyright all poetry first, that way no one else can claim it as their own. I know this as a fact, as I write poetry as well.

Also, please do not kill yourself. I say this, because your poetry sounds sad and very suicidal.

SUICIDE IS NEVER THE ANSWER, it solves nothing and you'll be shocked that when you die, if you were not ill as in unable to understand the choice you were making, you are held accountable. How do I know? I died from suicide twice and was sent back, which is actually rare, so you can't count on being sent back. I've personally known many people who chose suicide and I am the only one I know who was sent back, they all died and stayed dead. There were reasons I was allowed a chance that I cannot share.

Just don't do suicide, seek therapy from a qualified Psychologist, not a Psychiatrist as they tend to do more drugs, where a Psychologist focuses on therapy. I think you are a teen, so please find one adult you can trust to help you get into therapy and make sure you get in with a Psychologist who deals with teens and not adults, they'll be better able to help you if you are a teen. If you are an adult, then find a Psychologist who deals with adults. Ask what experiences they have with others and chose carefully. If you see one and after say a few weeks you really feel they are not the one whose right for you, don't think twice about finding a different one. You have to be open and honest about your feelings and what has brought you to this dispairing point in life or they can't help you. Most of the time it takes walking into the pain and dealing with it's causes, not running from it or numbing out.

Keep writing, it's a good way to get the emotions out and express yourself, it may also develop into a career.

BELIEVE LIFE CAN BE GOOD!

Answer 2

Work on number 5, theres much more that can be said there about the stars being lost loved ones. I like your thoughts on the colors black and white. Perhaps, you should combined them. Number 1 is filled with sadness. Someone hurt you? You don't want a repeat of that by them remembering you ever again. Overall, these poems came from your soul and thoughts. That is what poetry is about. Expressing yourself on paper. Poems don't always have to rhyme to make sense. All the best deep thinker. :)

Answer 3

I quite liked it. I thought that some of the metaphysical imagery was particularly effective. Interesting rhythmic devices too, which seemed to counterpoint the surrealism of the underlying metaphor of the humanity of the poet's compassionate soul, which contrives through the medium of the verse structure to sublimate this, transcend that, and come to terms with the fundamental dichotomies of the other and one is left with a profound and vivid insight into whatever it was the poem is about!

Answer 4

Your poems are very nice & romantic, I like them...

Poems are certain words coming from the 'Heart' and directly entering to 'Heart' of reader, if he/she be romatic.

Therefore, never asked how everyone feels about your poems, as it is natural that everyone not be romantic...

The business orineted people, guys &gals who have logical nature are unable to touch the "Heart"...

SO, make sure you always join to the group of people who love poems....

ALAWYS read your poem YOURSELF and recotd your voice in this way they will be more effective... you can build a Website and put your voice & poems there, I can help you...for now...cheer:)

Answer 5

#1 n 5 = awesome

Answer 6

Keep up the good work. It is always a good thing to write your feelings on paper. You can look back later in Life, and see how far you have progessed.

Answer 7

I think you have the right idea you just should maybe make them longer. You are right a poem doesn't have to rhyme but I would make them longer, like they are telling a story. Your use of metaphors and similes are very good.

Answer 8

They're all good, and
1) Heavy!
2)The best one
3) that one ran away, very Zen
4) after I thought about it I liked it
5) touching and sad.

Answer 9

I love the last one - Stars.

Although they seem quite depressing and I hope they aren't too self-expressive, because if they are, I reckon you need to lay off the dating game for a while and just chill

Answer 10

Umm. they're pretty good. They're pretty simple and everything which can be very good in poems, personally. You could improve them by putting them in like, the poem form and everything and fixing your typos!

Yayyy poetry is fun lol.