do you like this poem?
There ain't no other like this,
Jim & Tren, Tren & Jim, we & us.
We make something of our worlds;
Heart
Passion
Love
& Spirit
You are my rising sun as the day begins,
And I hope to be your sunset as the day ends.
There ain't no sun like ours.
No other feeling like this,
Has ever occurred to me.
It seems as more than love,
Compassion very deep.
Sometimes I wish I was there,
Or that you were near.
Yet so many obastacles come in between.
There ain't no other like this,
Us & We, We & Us, whatever you name 'Together'.
This love is:
So Pure
So True
So Me
So You.
We want to last forever,
And let Our Hearts go on.
There ain't no other like this,
And I don't want it to be gone.
No other feeling like this.
Has marked stroke upon me.
I know you know this feeling,
We feel it everyday.
I even like your words,
That we mean to say:
"I Luv U"
So, now I am talking to you
My sun has risin' up.
And once we our finished for today,
Your sunrise will soon become.
I Love You, Jimmy.
2007-01-21 04:17:59 · 7 answers · asked by tren 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I really like that poem!! It's very romantic! You and your boyfriend are living a fairy tale!! And it's very discriptive and imaginitive!!
2007-01-21 04:27:52 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. Don't worry about the grammar or using words like ain't. You've written the way you speak. It will sound more realistic to him.
2007-01-21 04:22:27 · answer #2 · answered by kiera70 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a sweet poem, but why use the slang words like 'ain't' and 'risin'? i think if you used proper grammer it would be more heartfelt and romantic, especially if you are going to write it down and give it to him. good luck!
2007-01-21 04:22:26 · answer #3 · answered by Lori 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OH i love it i have a pet named jimmy yea best poem i hear in a while lol
2007-01-21 04:23:12 · answer #4 · answered by Danielle is a HOT blonde 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
U r my rising sun....... its really beautiful,gongratulation gurl
2007-01-21 05:04:10 · answer #5 · answered by behnoush_k_1976 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes nice poem!
2007-01-21 04:20:23 · answer #6 · answered by Monstertruckfan12 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
excellent
2007-01-21 04:21:08 · answer #7 · answered by q6656303 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋