Ecstasy
I wake up with your arms wrapped around me. I can feel your breath upon my breast; then my heart drops and my eyes tear up as you lean in to kiss me. Your gentle touch and soft lips bring so much passion I don't wanna hold back anymore. I feel we've known one another a lifetime; then as your fingertips caress my body I want you even more. You whisper I love you as you pull my hair back, and lay my head upon the pillow not letting your hand slip. The glance into your eyes is amazing, and my hands tremble not as I run my fingers through your hair. Then you pull the cover over us and begin now its pure ecstasy.
2007-01-20 16:32:12 · 5 answers · asked by godsgracefulloveandwisdom 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Very Good, wendy.
2007-01-21 13:10:00 · answer #1 · answered by {☻§¤♥¿ð΅ΨΩΘΦЖ۞♫∞☺} 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you need to fix a few things up but otherwise it was great. As I read it I really got into it. I really thought about the words you used and how the two people in the poem felt. I thought it was amazing and... deep.
Keep up the good work
2007-01-21 00:44:49 · answer #2 · answered by BeatlesRocker 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you need to touch up a few sentences and fix up the last one. It seems rough. Smoothen it out like the rest of the poem. Its quite good. GJ
2007-01-21 00:41:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good. I like it. In the future I would suggest more similes and metaphors be written in your poems.
I love poetry. And the more you write, the better you become at it. So keep up the good work.
2007-01-21 00:41:36 · answer #4 · answered by Bre 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i would love to be the guy your talking about
2007-01-21 01:03:51 · answer #5 · answered by edward b 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋