as i walk through the area of darkness
there seems to be no light that i can grip or harness
there are people screaming in discomfort and pain
is this thing real or is it a game
i have in one hand a dollor bill the other a loaded gun
how much does it cost to kill? and is it any fun?
as i take the weapen and put it to my head
i pull the trigger and think about all those awuful things i said........
2007-01-19 11:29:35 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
yea it's dark but i do have to say it's good.
2007-01-19 11:36:40 · answer #1 · answered by Cathy B. 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Work a little on spelling and punctuation, but then...
You also need to work on the amount of syllables in each line, once you have mastered the amount of syllables, it will be great... until then, just good.
2007-01-19 11:50:54 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good pet, except the bit about is it real or is it a game?.. There is no difference and it makes no difference, remember that!
2007-01-19 11:47:42 · answer #3 · answered by hogasnog 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Soooo wicked......I mean not like bad wicked but like rad wicked lol. I'm going to write it down and show my best frind. Good job!
2007-01-19 12:59:40 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It very dark
2007-01-19 11:45:34 · answer #5 · answered by cowboybronco01 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was good but you spelled dollar and awful wrong.
2007-01-19 11:34:12 · answer #6 · answered by Myesha 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Are you like emo or something? No offense... But it was good though.
2007-01-19 11:35:11 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
good poem but don't kill yourself
2007-01-19 11:40:55 · answer #8 · answered by Frankie 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
PPPPPPPPBBBBBBBBLLLLLLLAAAAAAATTTTTTTTT!!!!!!
2007-01-19 11:36:27 · answer #9 · answered by Fel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋