Do I have talent as a poet?

Question

What if?

There were no more tomorrows
and all we had left was today?
would we drown it away in our sorrows
or would we love and laugh it away

Could we really make it great?
Knowing there will be no more
Already sealed by our fate
unable to go back to before

Could we hold our love so tight?
As if to never let it slip away
Would we be able to say goodnight
and let go of our last today?

Answer 1

Yes, I would say you have a gift.
Keep it up, we need more romantics to soothe the hatred evident in today's world.

I like it....I really do.

Answer 2

I enjoyed reading your poem, and it takes a lot of courage to put a personal poem out there for peoples views.
As a constructive critisism what I think could be improved is the structure and language. The language you use is fairly generic ("really great") and not worded originally, and the meter could use some more thought. The overall message is not wildly original so maybe you could think about writing something that is more challenging to a reader? At the moment I think your poem is the kind of thing you read in a greeting card: a bit twee and uninspiring but keep working at it. Remember the great poets often took months/ years to write a great piece of verse so keep practicing and challenging yourself creatively, and good luck.

Answer 3

What I read here is a great song lyrics and just add a few chorus lines and versre.
Poetry turned into music is a big time seller.
Your poem has some great parts that I would personally use in a Rock song, but not all of it, because songs usually are short , short stories in perspective to poems.

You have a good ryme going on and that is good , but it doesn't necessarily have to ryme in thats sense. Poetry of expression is almost distant for the average to identify it.\

I have read some great poetry from the 1800's and what impresses me about reading their poems is what's going through the mind of that person at that time.

If you want to feel what it's like talking to somebody from the past, just read their poems, because some of the poetry is actual speaking from their heart as they write of what's on their mind at that point in time.
It's not only expressed by the way they write it, but how they say it.
Picture them right in front of you talking to you and it is the year 1876. You can then grab a hold of how society has changed the way we speak and how we talk and how we think. Poetry is alive and if you feel it, your a poet!

Answer 4

Could be, but the meter needs some work. Count out how many syllables in each sentance and see how it jumps from seven to ten in some cases. Makes it a bit awkward.
e.g.:"There were no more tomorrows
All we've left is today
Would we drown it is sorrows
Love or laugh it away"....
See how that flows? Good luck and keep at it, as it's a nice concept.

Answer 5

I think u do have talent as a poet this is really good it gets straight to the point keep up the good work

Answer 6

Yes that is very good.

Answer 7

the answer is yes.

Answer 8

not too shabby :)