hi y'all. my brother recently wrote an essay on planes and the significance of the airfoil angle.
his teacher says this first sentence is awkward. Can you edit it for me to make it sound better?
Flight: What is one of mankind’s greatest achievements has had many changes, including cosmetic and internal modifications. It has transformed from the Wright brother’s plane at Kitty Hawk to today’s modern jet fighters and massive commercial airliners. These days, many engineers strive to increase the overall efficiency of planes in numerous ways, such as aerodynamics or.....................
2007-01-16 03:39:08 · 11 answers · asked by legendaryfrog 3 in Cars & Transportation ➔ Aircraft
OK- here goes:
Flight. While it is one of mankind’s greatest achievements, over the years it has endured many modifications, including cosmetic and internal. It's been transformed from the guise of the Wright brother’s "flying machine" at Kitty Hawk to the modern jet fighters and massive commercial airliners that we know today. These days, many engineers strive to increase the overall efficiency of planes in numerous ways, such as aerodynamics or.....................
2007-01-16 03:53:42 · answer #1 · answered by lilacslooklovely 4 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Flight:One of man's greatest achievements. Many changes have evolved the aircraft, including cosmetic and structural engineering. It has transformed from the Wright brother's original Kitty Hawk into today's modern jet fighters and massive commercial airliners. True to form, many engineers consistently increase the overall efficiency of aircraft with aerodynamics,...
2007-01-16 19:20:15 · answer #2 · answered by dyke_in_heat 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Here's my take... of course, I ain't no college boy.
Flight: one of mankind’s greatest achievements. It has gone through significant changes during the past century, including major cosmetic, structural and internal modifications. It has been transformed from the Wright brother’s Flyer at Kitty Hawk to today’s modern jet fighters and massive commercial airliners. These days, many engineers strive to increase the overall efficiency of planes in numerous ways, such as aerodynamics or.....................
2007-01-16 11:51:48 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 3⤋
Flight is one of mankind’s greatest achievements and has undergone many changes, including cosmetic and internal modifications. It was first achieved with the Wright brother’s plane at Kitty Hawk and is now manifested in various forms such as contemporary jet fighters and massive commercial airliners. Aerodynamic engineers strive to increase the overall efficiency of planes in numerous ways, such as aerodynamics or.....................
2007-01-16 11:54:44 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 4⤋
What is one of mankind's greatest achievements,"powered flight", has, over the years,completely transformed our society through its almost miraculous engineering developments.
He can use this as the initial introductory statement, and follow up with the innovations that have occurred in the last 100 years. Don't go into too much detail, as it can bore an audience that does not share your love of aircraft. mention the "cantilever method" of construction, to the DC-2-3 airliners it was used on etc. (it did away with the need for wire bracing, for example) to the move from props to jets. Mention to the tremendous progress made in A/C design during WW1 and 2. Good Luck!!
2007-01-16 21:52:26 · answer #5 · answered by gregva2001 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Easy as 1, 2, 3.
1. Tell them what you're going to tell them.
2. Tell them.
3. Summarize what you told them.
Flight is one of man's greatest achievements that has gone through cosmetic and internal changes.
The Wright brother's plane at Kitty Hawk has transformed into modern jet fighters and massive commerical airliners.
Today engineers strive to increase the efficiency of planes in ways such as aerodynamics, ease of flying, and of course comfort to the passengers.
GOD bless you and your brother, always.
MBA-Boston University
2007-01-16 12:00:16 · answer #6 · answered by May I help You? 6 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Flight is one of man's greatest achievements. Through many modifications, including cosmetic and internal, it has transformed the Wright brother's aircraft at Kittyhawk into today's modern jet fighters and massive commercial airliners. With today's technology, many engineers are striving to increase the overall efficiency of planes in numerous ways, such as aerodynamics,.....
2007-01-16 11:49:16 · answer #7 · answered by Milkaholic 6 · 0⤊ 6⤋
Flight: One of mankinds greatest acheivements has gone through many changes. From it's begainings with the Wright brothers simple functional plan at Kitty Hawk........................
2007-01-19 04:18:31 · answer #8 · answered by Wolf of the Black Moon 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Using the word "what" is the problem. It sounds like he wants to ask a question.
He can write:
Flight, one of mankind's greatest achievements, has undergone many modifications, both internal and external.
2007-01-16 12:20:54 · answer #9 · answered by mach_92 4 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Flight, which is one of mankind's greatest achievements, has had many changes, including cosmetic and internal modifications etc....
That's the only thing I would change.
2007-01-16 11:50:39 · answer #10 · answered by FlyChicc420 5 · 1⤊ 5⤋