The title is "about a time when your hard work and effort was not appreciated". PLS I NEEDED THIS BY TODAY OR ELSE I AM DOOM!!!! :(
2007-01-15 12:49:55 · 6 answers · asked by benoit1789 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
my idea is "helping a friend who was injured during the trip in the jungle in the end i manage to save him and bring him to hospital but he did not apreciate me at all" if the idea does not suits the topic then tell me your idea for this topic pls.
2007-01-15 12:53:04 · update #1
To marianne : you mean not to show anger towards my friend is it?
2007-01-15 13:02:15 · update #2
it is a secondary school composition title the full title is "Write about a time when your hardwork and effort was not appreciated."
2007-01-15 13:04:46 · update #3
it is a narrrative writing
2007-01-15 13:05:24 · update #4
i like it. i hope that you won't use sentences like that in your essay though or it will be an "F" for sure. other than that you're good to go.
2007-01-15 12:56:53 · answer #1 · answered by pinkcbpoet 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's ok, I think the issue is more the title.
Is this a formal essay? If it is, that title would be written off immediatly. Try something more like
"When reward ceases to follow effort"
It's more formal, proper. Your title seems like you took a sentence and cut the beginning and end out and then stuck that on the top as your title.
A title should be short and concise, so your reader can glance at it once and get the juste of it.
2007-01-15 21:00:12 · answer #2 · answered by Kipper to the CUP! 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
how about this title for your essay...
"Jungle Cross"
you still go on about the story but compare saving your friend with a mission you need to do... not so much a burden but a responsibility you need to bear as a friend.
and in the end not everything that you do is appreciated...even by your closest friends, but the clincher would be you would do it anyway.
that makes for a great essay! hope u get an A
2007-01-15 21:05:35 · answer #3 · answered by klao8 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The title is a hot mess. It doesnt have a direction. Fix it by shortening it and more to the point. This seems more like a story, it couldnt possibly be a essay.
2007-01-15 20:56:57 · answer #4 · answered by Halle Berry 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds to me like your topic suits the title of the essay just fine.
2007-01-15 20:58:02 · answer #5 · answered by LolaCorolla 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That sounds like it might fit.
You may consider adding that even though your friend did not appreciate your assistance in the end, you sense of accomplishment far out weighed any sense of frustration at your friend. Use an altruistic ending and you'll earn more points.
UPDATE to question: Yes, do not show frustration for your friend.
2007-01-15 20:56:08 · answer #6 · answered by marianne 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋