Choke on the midnight air
Scream when there's no one there
Though you drench in regret
You can never forget
The day you lied
The day I died
The day you pass up the opprutunity
The day you forgot about me
But I have no room to forgive
You wouldn't go on and let me live
Now I hold bow and arrow in hand
Under the mocking moon and flying sand
Ready yourself for the everlasting fight
IT SHALL END TONIGHT
2007-01-15 11:13:30 · 9 answers · asked by LizziFishie 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It's a powerful poem and not many people will understand it like I do.
2007-01-15 11:41:15 · answer #1 · answered by HachiKun 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well first thing I would point out is its "VERSE" not a POEM.. verse rhymes poetry does not.. there is a difference.. Now i point that out not to be a ***** but to make you aware of the difference (I write and have been published under "verse".. I dont do poetry at all) Under Verse.. its not bad actually little rough but then again so are some of mine back in the day.. (and still)
'Angel
2007-01-15 11:25:40 · answer #2 · answered by darchangel_3 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was beautiful, not many people these days have good writing talent, and you do. I like how it has kind of a dark theme in it, it's very nice. You could almost make it into a song or something. Don't stop writing poetry, you're good at it!
2007-01-15 11:45:54 · answer #3 · answered by këlly 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very dark, I like it a lot. It flows really nicely and it's not so cliche. It seems like a lot of the poems these days are all about saying "oh poor me.. death.. death.. death" but yours is marvelous! Revenge! I love it.
You spelt opportunity wrong!
2007-01-15 11:18:44 · answer #4 · answered by Kipper to the CUP! 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it! it's very dark, and deep! but on the other hand, it makes me think that it's about someone who is getting ready to commit suicide or something.
2007-01-15 11:20:52 · answer #5 · answered by Brittany J 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmm... A bit cliche.
2007-01-15 11:30:38 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a really good poem.
2007-01-15 11:27:06 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its beautiful. *Stares in awe* I wish I were gifted with poetry...
2007-01-15 11:40:11 · answer #8 · answered by I know everything... 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really good and deep
2007-01-15 11:18:05 · answer #9 · answered by NILEqween 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋