ChECK IT OUT?

Question

Hey, I wrote a song here. Its my first attempt at rap, since I usually write rock songs. But tell me what you think…..it kinda sounds like eminem.

RUN AWAY

I have some money in my back pocket.
That’s all ill ever need.
I close the door behind me,
And run along the street.
I feel the wind run up my spine,
And tears run down my cheek.
I have nothing going fine.
I have nobody to seek.
The only thing I brought, is my guitar.
Its old and ritty,
But it’s my only home and friend that I got.

*Chorus*
Run away, run away.
No one will miss you.
Run away, run away.
Cuz nobody likes you.
Run away, run away.
The world is a cold place.
Run away, run away.
Before they come get you.

I don’t need an education,
Cuz I’m holdin God’s hands.
I don’t need no ****** money,
As long as I stick to my plans.
I don’t need my parents.
I don’t like to be told how to live.
Take it away, you can have.
Except I don’t have much to give.

You said it would get better,
So far you were song.
But here I am, look at me,
Writing this song.
You told me you would take me, despite of our difference.
You said you would love me, be my protection and witness.
But here, sit down, and try to ****** explain this.
But I don’t care, it’s over.
I’m done with this shti.
I’m moving on, bring it on.
I don’t care, not a bit.
*Chorus*

I’ll search and find a heart,
That’s not as shallow as yours.
I’ll put you in Hell, find the key,
And lock the dam doors.
And what if I don’t wanna grow up, to be just like you?
Sue me bicth, get a lawyer. Wait and see what I do.
Cuz you see, there’s a catch,
In every game that we play.
And this time,
Close your eyes, count to 78.
And when you open them,
There’ll be a big ****** surprise.
You’ll find out, that I caught up to every one of your lies.
So stop bitchin, cuz baby this time I’m not in the mood.
I’m not getting stepped on, and I’m not afraid to get rude.

I suggest you listen, cuz this is the last thing that I’ll say:
Don’t forget me, good bye, and have a nice day.

*Chorus* 2x

Answer 1

Thats really good. Very deep.

Answer 2

its good but it doesnt seem like the lyrics to a rap song, more like idk but not rap keep up the good work!

Answer 3

ItZ gUD