Grammar HELP?

Question

How can I make these sentences better?

1. At first, Elie has an absolute viw in which he believes that leaders represent and care for their followers.

This sentence needs a transition.
2. Elie has a definite belief in which he thinks leaders support and comfort their people.

3. This lesson has showed Elie how his father represents those qualities during their time as Buna's harsh concentrarion camps.

How can I make my concluding sentences much better?
Elie has experienced unforgettable hardships in death camps and his beloved father was always there to abide him throughour those long days. Sometimes leaders have distince impacts in society and their citizens. It may be positve or negative, but no matter what the reason, their actions and gestures still affect their people and their specific opinions.

Also for if you have read "Night" by Elie Wiesel, when and where does the book take place, and can you please give me a brief plot summary.

Thanks

Answer 1

Your verb tenses need to be active, not passive. Also, doublecheck your spelling.

1. At first, Elie believes absolutely that leaders represent and care for their followers.

2. Elie believes leaders support and comfort their people.

3. This lesson showed Elie how his father represents those qualities during their time in Buna's harsh concentration camps.

Answer 2

Oh my goodness, that's a lot. Let's start with where and when the book takes place. This is the biography of Ellie Wiesel, a Jew who survived through one of Hitler's concentration camps The first camp was Auschwitz but he was later moved to Buchenwald. He and his family were taken from their home in 1944.

Now, back to grammar, the first sentence:

At first (what first are we speaking of? Is this before the soldiers removed the families from their homes and cities? you need to be specific here. For example: When the first German soldiers began moving into Elie's town, he still believed that he and his family would be protected. (something like that)

Sentence number two is very much the same thing as sentence number one, if this is an essay(and I suspect it is) you now need to find in the book evidence to support what you just claimed
(as per example above: read pages6-7 paraphrase, when all foreign jews had been deported in cattle cars, Elie believed they were being moved to a location safe from the Jews. Even a friend, who returned weeks later, shot in the leg urging them that everyone on those cattle cars had been forced to dig their own graves and then shot and the would be too could not convince Elie that his life would end when the Germans arrived. (something like that) Elie did believe in his leaders to care for and support him at that time, but if you are trying to transition sentence 2 into sentence 3 that makes no sense, so I'll assume you're not and move on.

Sentence 3: What lessson did Elie learn and what qualities of his father are you talking about? The concentration camp is Buchenwald I'm not sure what you're tring to say here so I'll just fix the grammar of what you've got: "This lesson has shown Elie how his father represented those qualities during the time they were together in the harsh concentration camps." (I think that's what you mean to say.

Conclusion sentence: It might help if you specify his hardships(loss of family, home, life, freedom, being beaten, starved, forced to dispose of his fallen fellow Jews, left to die when ill or injured, striped of humanity, so many hardships to choose from) I wouldn't use the word abide, that implies that his father had freedoms he did not to help him through it I would say "encourage him to fight for survival" You have three seperate idead going on in this paragraph (hardship, influence of father and impact of leaders) If you can find a way to combine these ideas and lead it to what Elie is today then you have a strong conclusion.
Suggestion:
"Elie's unforgettable experience in the concentration camps, rightfully known as death camps left him a changed man. The hardships (here's where you mention a few that really get your reader to see how that would change a man)
he faced , he would likely never have survived without having had his father there beside him helping him, encouraging him to fight for survival"

Leaders always have an impact on their citizens but these were neither leaders, nor was Elie a citizen they were a murderous army and he was a dead Jew walking, a prisoner of war sentenced to death just waiting for his number to be up, so I would rephrase that whole ending. Yes, their actions did affect him, and there was nothing positive about it. The reasons were hate and supremacy and world dominance and Jews were the vile scum on the bottom of Hitler's shoes in his eyes. I suggest if you really want a strong ending you need to read the book. You need to read the book anyway. This is not a story, this is a living recording of just how evil man is capable of being, and Elie Wiesel was an innocent vicitm to that evil. Had Hitler succeeded, you may not have been born because your ancestors might have been next when he was finished eliminating the Jews. Mandkind has a blind eye and this is a warning to open our eyes, make sure we never let this happen again. Hitler was a powerful terrorist with a huge army behind him. It happens still today, our own country recently felt a taste of that when the twin towers were destroyed, just another focus on a different group. You really want to have a good paper, you really want to know what our soldiers are in Iraq, Afganastan taking down Saddam and Usama and all other known terrorist leaders for? Read the book. No one of any race, religion, height, intelligence, country of origin, class of wealth, whatever, whoever you are should be denied the simple freedom and live in fear of those who hate enough to destroy as Hilter did.