What would you do,
If I said I love you?
What would you say,
If I asked you to stay?
What would you do,
If I smiled at you?
What would you say,
If I went away?
What would I do,
If I never found you?
2007-01-09 18:38:21 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
It's very good...I like it alot. You should check out poetry.com if you haven't already. You can get you poems published. Its a pretty cool site :o)
2007-01-09 18:42:43 · answer #1 · answered by Lacey C 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, you did say you were bored..
I would suggest you go out and drive in a Ford
A poet you're quite not
But it seems you're inlove with ....Some little snot.
What would you do if she was never found?
Hit the dust like a baby and cry on the ground?
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Got a message in the mail from the poster AND
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I guess I should shoot myself in the toe on this one.. Yes I guess I sounded mean and I am sorry.
I did a writing at one time that said.... when one does a writing they are looking into the inner being of ones self.. and should not be discouraged or critisized for doing so... That if this person chose to share their inner selves with others then the writing was meant to be enjoyed or given as a gift for knowledge..
Again I apologize to this poster... immensely
Soon to be your friend... hugggs
Marsha (sewwoodyou- grandmother of 4)
2007-01-09 18:50:57 · answer #2 · answered by H.O.T. Dog 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's clever, albeit a little repetitive. Better than some poems I've read here. Good work!
2007-01-09 18:42:49 · answer #3 · answered by drshorty 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. I would change the last line to ---If I'd never found you? Just my opinion
2007-01-09 18:53:28 · answer #4 · answered by DixeVil 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Simple and sweet.
2007-01-09 18:43:20 · answer #5 · answered by nunya 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice i like it.
2007-01-09 18:42:55 · answer #6 · answered by 2sweet4u 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good but the repetition of 'you' doesn't make it unique
2007-01-09 18:41:58 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good.
2007-01-09 18:43:45 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good!!!
2007-01-09 18:48:09 · answer #9 · answered by iris 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋