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2007-01-09 11:55:05 · 3 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
"Ozymandias" by Shelly
"To His Coy Mistress" by Andrew Marvel
2007-01-09 12:06:51 · answer #1 · answered by habs_freak 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Thanks for letting me know this is just the beginning. I look forward to more. It is an excellent poem, a ballad worthy of a TV show! I love the choice of your vocabulary. It is strong and captivating, holding me into the story as you reveal the details. I even googled Lake Croix for background information. It shows rather than tells. S2 L3 "If only, if only, if only to feel". I think there are too many "If only" in the line. Might try "If only... Yes, if only to make us feel." Or something else that fits your poem. S3 L3 why "yull"? Since you are not creating a native language, and do not use other words, it appears to be a typo of you'll. S6 L3 "no girls was nice, sorry I feign" Did you use feign to rhyme or were you pretending that "no girls" was actually not so nice? S7 L2 - the reference to tank is odd. I know you are in tents, unless you moved because 5" of water may create a sudden flood. What is the purpose? Did you move? S8 L4 - great ending. You have us involved in your poem, the story of 6 men where only 3 remain. Terrific cliff hanger. Write some more. I look forward to parts 2 and 3 and perhaps more. Details make the story. I'd like to know how they handled the storm that night. I think it is significant since you tell us in the beginning that once there were 6, now there are 3. .
2016-05-23 01:17:02 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Daddy by Sylvia Plath and This Be The Verse by Phillip Larkin
2007-01-09 12:01:43 · answer #3 · answered by cassandra 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋