HALF PAST TEN
it all hapens half past ten.....
gazing at moon light thou for short
it was there looking like a petal of uncharted flower
thou sad as be on broken sword
it came upon slowely i asked
what so hurting thee heart
thee look upon like to saw my heart
thee smiles and vanishes......
with words in air
"love happens only when on texication in heart"
i not understand then...
days go by i searched her not to say bye
thou dying am now
and smelled her sent of flower
opening my eye she is standing by..
saying the words
"thou heart is pure shall we envoy no more"
i saw me going by her side
with all the worries aside...
i laught and said
it all hapens when half past ten................
~lost all~
2007-01-08 17:02:44 · 7 answers · asked by zain86us 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Quotations
It's very beautiful!I agree wiz abnatra it's as if u r living it,it seems like u r taking z words from ur heart n once again 4 a guy u write extremely well.it was as if i could see z scenes in front of me!
2007-01-08 22:24:05 · answer #1 · answered by Zahrah N. 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You should read more to improve your vocabulary. Try to read challenging novels that have complex ideas behind them. That way you can formulate fairly more original thoughts and not rehash society's refuse, otherwise known as the pop love songs
2007-01-08 17:34:52 · answer #2 · answered by AK 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow...You're really good. The feeling you have when reading it; as if you are seeing the scene, you're living it. Don't stop writing, sincerely it is extremely beautiful.
Those who don't like it, are THEY able to write like you?
2007-01-08 20:48:01 · answer #3 · answered by abnatra 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you english is like you are a bible writer .It makes one even feel lazy to read it.Refine your english then it might sound better.
2007-01-08 17:14:23 · answer #4 · answered by jus-tus 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
YES ITS NICE DON'T STOP WRITING GO HUN.XO
2007-01-08 17:17:17 · answer #5 · answered by cilia 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good..keep it up
2007-01-08 20:13:24 · answer #6 · answered by Tara 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
what?
2007-01-08 17:07:09 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋