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I go out at night, and I lie on the ground.
I breath the fresh air, and I hear all the sound.
I look at the trees, as they reach to the sky,
Getting their last glimps of heaven, before they wither and die.
But the wind shakes a bronch, and a seed drops near,
And I know that new life is about to begin here.
I look at the moon, as it brightens the hour,
And I know this must be God showing his power.
I look at the stars, as the glisten above.
I know this must be God, showing his love.
And I look at the world, always changing, always new.
And I think God Almighty, an act way overdue.

What do you think? Are there any spelling errors i need to know about?

2007-01-04 13:04:45 · 25 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture Religion & Spirituality

Ok, nvm. I know there's spelling errors. I'm a fast typer. Just what do you think?

2007-01-04 13:20:29 · update #1

25 answers

Your use of the word "lie" in the first line is often debatable. Many grammarains say it should be "lay" and not "lie", which they strictly define as telling a falsehood. Breathe is misspelled, having ommitted the final "e". "Glimpse" is without the final "e". "Branch" is misspelled, having an "o" where and "a" belongs. "They" needs a "y" at the end on line 9 following the title line. And the word "think" in the final line should be "thank". And everytime you use the pronoun "his" in reference to God, the first letter is supposed to be capitalized. God Bless you.

2007-01-04 13:16:00 · answer #1 · answered by ? 7 · 0 0

Spell branch for bronch, I think should be more correct. Add a line in praise of God who cares for the new life. The changing world is permitted to go on as predicted in His words. Ours is to get involved to see the more souls are saved as Jesus commanded us for His kingdom before the end times.

2007-01-04 13:12:38 · answer #2 · answered by Ptuan 3 · 0 0

The Poem and meaning is Beautiful. Good Job and there are a few spelling errors, so when your ready to type this out and in a good format, make sure all the spellings are accurate. This is a beautiful verse and shows you are a true child of God. Thank you and keep writing.

2007-01-04 13:08:11 · answer #3 · answered by Norskeyenta 6 · 0 0

Sorry, no. it incredibly is why: (a million) You look attempting to make ordinary verse, yet your metre is atypical. (2) you're attempting to rigidity some rhymes that only do not artwork. (3) Stanza 2 would not make experience fullyyt. with the aid of that I mean you look attempting to declare something, however the grammar has failed you. It desires a sprint adjustment from an 'English' view factor. (4) In stanza 3, you assert "As His grace...", besides the shown fact that it is not sparkling the style you meant 'as' to be interpreted. There would not look a clause dependency linked with it. back, it incredibly is an English grammar subject. only desires a tiny little bit of a tweak to get your meaning in the time of. additionally, -- and it incredibly isn't an definitely blunders in keeping with se -- yet in ordinary verse, one often makes use of finished and marvelous punctuation in the time of and preliminary caps on each line. So it desires a rewrite for readability and grammar. restoration the rhymes in the different case elect sparkling verse fairly. artwork on the metre. (attempt examining it out loud collectively as snapping your hands to help with that.) different than those, it incredibly is nice. shop at it. Take care.

2016-10-30 00:53:31 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0 0

Lovely

2007-01-04 14:22:19 · answer #5 · answered by jasmin2236 7 · 0 0

Sounds nice. You misspelled "branch" on the fifth line though, and it should be "breathe" instead of breath on the second line.

2007-01-04 13:07:01 · answer #6 · answered by chrisatmudd 4 · 0 0

I would change,
,as they reach TOWARD the sky
shakes a BRANCH
stars, as THEY glisten
And if you know something you know it. Therefore..
"And I know this is God, showing his power" "love"

2007-01-04 13:15:02 · answer #7 · answered by jadamgrd 7 · 0 0

There are some mistakes in it. I suggest you think carefully about the last line, after all, one day you will meet him in person.

2007-01-04 13:21:01 · answer #8 · answered by Bad bus driving wolf 6 · 0 0

Yawn ... spelt branch and breathe wrong ... next time I have insomnia you have provided me with a sure-fire cure.

2007-01-04 13:11:28 · answer #9 · answered by zappafan 6 · 0 0

I am not sure if the last sentence is suppose to be "I thank God almight..." Or I think God almighty..... But it is very nice....Bless you.

2007-01-04 13:08:27 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0 0

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