The purpose of this exploratory study is to find out if a therapeutic recreation program will improve the behavior of children in a residential setting.
2007-01-04 02:19:06 · 9 answers · asked by heavenlea_7 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
Your sentence may work depending where it is located in your paper...If it is your thesis statement then you may want to make it more to the point, but this doesn't sound like a pursuasie essay so you should be ok...
You might consider: This exploratory study will allow us to discover if a therapeutic recreation program will improve the behavior of children in a residential setting.
Or Possibly: This study will allow us to discover if therapeutic recreation improves the behavior of children in a residential setting.
Good Luck!
2007-01-04 02:33:10 · answer #1 · answered by kk9soccer 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's presumably for an academic report of some kind so I don't think it's necessarily too long, given its context and audience. You could shorten it by three words, though, if you wanted, as follows:
This exploratory study aims to find out if a therapeutic recreation program will improve the behavior of children in a residential setting.
2007-01-04 02:23:27 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No, I don't think it is too long. If you want to change it you could put:
This exploratory study will discuss the effects of a therapeutic recreation program on the behavior of children in a residential setting.
2007-01-04 02:23:11 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No, it's technically fine.
You might want to change it to "The purpose of this study is to explore whether a therapeutic recreation program will improve the behavior of children in a residential setting."
The uses of "exploratory" and "to find out if" are redundant in your original sentence.
2007-01-04 02:30:13 · answer #4 · answered by Pink Denial 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The purpose of this study is to explore the effects of recreational programs on children.
2007-01-04 02:23:25 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No that's fine. It's not too long as in if it would be a run-on sentence. It's just fine. I read over the sentence a few times, and I find no way to change it. It's cool.
2007-01-04 02:29:11 · answer #6 · answered by ViCKi!™|` 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a statement of purpose. It should be in a one sentence form. As long as it's grammatically correct, you're golden.
2007-01-04 02:27:25 · answer #7 · answered by Ricky J. 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There is nothing grammatically wrong with your sentence...
2007-01-04 02:23:03 · answer #8 · answered by Casey P 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It seems okay to me.
2007-01-04 02:23:44 · answer #9 · answered by Tater 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋