My Feelings for you
like none other
My thought of you
more then a friend or lover
higher then hormonal dedication
surpassing teenage infactuation
A tender kiss, to my heartless lips
A heartfilled touch forming to my cold fingertips
My mental technicality to lace my toung in silver
Your words can desolve me
to a squeemish quiver
Shivering in your arms,your loving heat
Warmed with your heart
Touches cause me wild
Your patient eyes
like an Innocent child
Learning from me
as I from you
For never unspoken
I love you...
2006-12-31 19:33:58 · 17 answers · asked by hopelessly romantic♥ 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
That was a poor excuse for poetry. First, there are TONS of spelling errors- it goes way beyond typos. There are quite a few grammatical errors as well. Poetic license is one thing but you're supposed to use it to manipulate language for a reason. I liked SOME of what you did with the rhyme and your verbage- but most of it I've heard before- primarily in most of the poorly written poems that I see here on Yahoo Answers.
2007-01-03 12:18:31 · answer #1 · answered by Brento! 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Wow, i really like that. You are very talented with words. Post more I sure would love to read them. GOOD JOB Hun!
2007-01-01 03:46:18 · answer #2 · answered by curious 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hye... not bad...
is there like a teen mag. or something you could try to peddle that off too or something? etc...
poetry is so underrated in this world. I am not hip.. to it per say, I have learned to realized the importance of it in our growth and understanding into those things that we don't understand... love is one.. death, life etc....
2007-01-01 03:39:25 · answer #3 · answered by Maken trax 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. Kudos!!
2007-01-01 03:36:49 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow that is really beautiful,ur good...i can write poems when im depressed but they're not as good as urs
2007-01-01 03:37:51 · answer #5 · answered by eazybreezy103 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's the sweetest thing i read and knew of today.
2007-01-01 03:37:41 · answer #6 · answered by kitty 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice one!!...=)
gotta a pretty good inspiration there huh?!?..
it can surely tel you're IN LOVE!!!
P.S. infactuationhas no c..
just wanna let you know..
2007-01-01 03:50:02 · answer #7 · answered by natasha 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're a true poet =D
2007-01-01 03:35:15 · answer #8 · answered by lynneboo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow, such a nice poem
2007-01-01 03:47:15 · answer #9 · answered by starapproximate 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it you are a true poet. it really reveals a lot
2007-01-01 03:37:58 · answer #10 · answered by tweety_baby258 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋