Everybody stood quietly looking at everyone else’s apron (dicey was the only one not looking at everyone else), and Miss Eversleigh walked around to everyone, studying their aprons, Dicey thought, playing like the aprons mattered. It was at the first laugh that Dicey looked up.
2006-12-31 14:18:08 · 23 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Preschool
this is an edited paragraph from a book that i needed to change to kindergarten level.
2006-12-31 15:28:55 · update #1
No, it is not kindergarten material. I cut and paste your paragraph into Word and calculated the Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level and it displayed 10.4 (10th grade).
You can do this yourself by entering your sentence or sentences in Word. Click on Tools/ Spelling and Grammar. Make sure under the Options the "Show Readability Statistics" is checked. This will display the US grade level of what is written.
2006-12-31 14:35:39 · answer #1 · answered by missi8301 2 · 3⤊ 1⤋
In some cases.. A kindergartener will only know what they see or what they experienced in their lifetime. It is ok for Kindergarteners to be curious about a book and I'm sure that it was only a lesson plan for the children to get more involved and excited about a book they have read. Admiring everyone elses aprons is a way to express Art appreciation (if they colored and such on them) Children are different. Maybe Dicey didn't really like the activity or thought it was boring. Most adults think that children likes the same things.. but not really. Each child has their own personality. It seems like the other children didn't have a problem with this. Maybe the teacher should have redirected Dicey or do something else more stimulating or maybe the teacher could have suggested for her to add something more to her apron. Or maybe the teacher should have explained the activity better. I hope this helped
2007-01-01 07:11:46 · answer #2 · answered by lindsay_4524 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Children understand things that they can relate back to their own lives. That said, I do not think a Kindergartnder would understand that passage for a couple of reasons. One--most likely they have no idea what an apron is; they are not commonly used anymore and a kindergartner will probably not have any experience with it. Maybe smock, or bib, but not apron. Second, the plot seems to be a bit abstract. What I mean is, who is laughing, why are they laughing, why is Dicey not looking at his apron, why is the teacher studying their aprons? Those are questions that I am assuming would be answered later on and while it would probably interest older readers, not kindergartners. They would more interested in stories where the plot line is very simple with a singular problem, climax, solution with few extraneous details. A very popular book at that age are things such as "The Very Hungry Caterpillar" where the plot is very simple. Even Charlotte's Web isn't intended for kids that young.
Good luck. I don't know what you are using this for, but you will be ok.
2006-12-31 14:41:24 · answer #3 · answered by pamk3500 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
The answer is NO!!!
By the time you edited THIS to a kindergartner's level...you will have had to "rewritten" the entire passage...to fit what they can relate to...and then...you would have a whole NEW passage...so why even bother? Find a story that they can relate to and understand... NO ONE is named "Dicey" and "Miss Eversleigh" is also hard to understand! NONE of this seems to be appropriate..for today......young children at this age need to relate to their world..not the "days of old"!
2007-01-01 02:30:59 · answer #4 · answered by photogram1 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think its a little complex. Here's what I'd do (although maybe I'm wrong):
Everybody stood quietly, looking at everyone else's apron. Dicey was the only one who wasn't looking at everyone else.
Miss Eversleigh walked around to everyone, and she studiedd their aprons.
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I don't even understand what you mean with "Dicey thought, playing.... mattered".
Would it be:
"Dicey thought, "Playing like the aprons mattered."
or
"Dicey thought. He was playing like the aprons mattered."
or
"Dicey thought and played, as if the aprons matter."
or
"Dicey thought that playing like the aprons mattered."
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Even "It was at the first laugh that Dicey looked up" is a little more complex than maybe it ought to be. It would as if, "When Dicey heard the first laugh he looked up."
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2006-12-31 20:59:03 · answer #5 · answered by WhiteLilac1 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I agree w/ pamk3500, I had to read the passage a couple of times to understand who was laughing, And I am 31 yrs old, w/ a high school education. So I am thinking it is too much for a kindergartner.
2007-01-02 02:47:18 · answer #6 · answered by ksueditz 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I teach Kindergarten and this is not kindergarten material at all. I would recommend re wording it and adding realia like puppets, aprons (most won't know what that is), and acting it out if needed.
2007-01-02 09:12:39 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I teach preschool in SA and my kids are on Austen and Bronte challenging a child's mind- And they ask questions and are able to fully understand the literature- Good on you for enabling children to challenge their minds -all those others who believe a child of four to six is incapable obviously have never bothered to challenge there own minds
2007-01-01 18:49:22 · answer #8 · answered by connermcshane 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No, this isn't written at Kindergarten level, and could use a bit of rewriting in the beginning. The use of "everyone" four times in one sentence is redundant. Use you 'magination- you can do better! I like the name of the teacher. :)
2006-12-31 14:42:01 · answer #9 · answered by AMEWzing 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Not for a kindergarten kid...go look at some books for them. You are not even in the same ball park
2006-12-31 14:26:02 · answer #10 · answered by starting over 6 · 2⤊ 1⤋