Can you please read my poem...?

Question

Okay, so this poem is in southern vernacular. It's really just something I wrote, but I want to know what people think.

Note: I realize that things are misspelled (i.e. 'ya'). It's supposed to be that way : )

Don’t worry now baby
Ya can run along the gardens till that watch stops tickin’
Ya can hold that little puppy and feed him and play
I won’t take anythin’ away
When ya grow ol’ just remember
Momma’s Gotcha
Every Bit

When ya stumble and fall
Catch those rainbows, catch’em all
Never doubt what I see
You are my heart, my boy, my baby
So when they tell ya that ya life ain’t worth nuttin'
Don’t ya listen to a word
Plug ya ears with eyes shut tight
Momma wants ya and she gotcha
Every bit

Answer 1

Good job! Just keep at it! Poetry is to be enjoyed by the writer as much as the reader. Keep a notebook of your poems in the order you write them and you will notice how much they improve along the years! Poetry is a way to express your feelings and thoughts. Glad to see you are trying your hand at it! Again, good job!

Answer 2

Its good...you just need a title for the poem. When you wrote So when they tell ya that ya life ain’t worth nuttin' it does not match the mood/tone in the rest of the poem. Everything else i think is great!

Answer 3

That's good! I've wrote a poem a lot like that once!

Answer 4

Thats really good..I suck really bad at writing poems! Your good at it..keep to it..

Answer 5

Keep trying your getting there...............
Doesn't matter much what people think,
you deserve some credit for just trying.

Answer 6

It's good.

Answer 7

its very nice