I had to write this for school, what grade would you give it?... sorry about the end, it got cut off, over the limit...
Adventurous
I am working my way up the slippery rocks. A kid in front of me is barely moving. Her legs right in front of me constantly shaking, making me more nervous. With each step I take, I am getting closer and closer to the top. My heart is beating so fast like a herd of buffalos are running inside of me. The smell of damp trees and plants surround me as well as a chilly breeze that drifts down my spine.
I try to keep my eyes from looking down at the rocky, steep hill with sharp edges and narrow paths. As I look up, I see the white puffy clouds that stand out from the crystal blue sky above. They come closer with each step I take. I am so scared that I’ll slip on a rock and fall off the edge. To help keep my balance, I grab onto rocks in front of me or to the side. Before I knew it, the counselor in the front cheerfully says, “congratulations, you’ve all made
2006-12-28 19:31:13 · 12 answers · asked by nikkecola17 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
i want a big mac
2006-12-28 19:32:57 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
From your beginning to the place where you stop, it should be able to pass for your school. But since you couldn't post your ending in here, I have no idea what kind of effects will it bring to you....
2006-12-29 03:43:01 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW I LOVED IT
it's sounded like it was written by a proffesional writer
great story
loved it
love it love it love it
i would give you an A+++++++++
2006-12-29 03:34:40 · answer #3 · answered by jemba 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There's an "Add details " option.
Y dont u add the rest of the story.It sounds pretty gud till now
2006-12-29 03:41:24 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very nice dear, but I think you have posted it in the wrong section, this is the jokes and riddles section.
2006-12-29 03:35:05 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
if i was your teacher maybe i will give you B-. it was 50% ok you should work harder than this
2006-12-29 03:35:41 · answer #6 · answered by oleoliharu 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice story
2006-12-29 03:33:48 · answer #7 · answered by Mag 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
yeah
2006-12-29 03:42:41 · answer #8 · answered by momof3 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well its hard to answer as we can't read it all. but it sounds alright.
2006-12-29 03:33:39 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow!. It is very good. common ! keep it up.
2006-12-29 03:34:41 · answer #10 · answered by Barnabas 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋