what do you think about my poem?

Question

MY MAN

MY MAN IS SIMPLE ; HE LIVES EVERYDAY AS IT COMES
HE IS MY ROCKSTAR AND HE KEEPS ON ROCKING MY HEART
HE IS THOUGHTFUL YET SOMETIMES I CANT SEE IT
HE IS THE MAN, AND HE IS MY MAN
SOMETIMES WHEN I GET ANGRY WITH HIM
I THINK ABOUT GIVING UP WITH HIM
BUT MY HEART IS STILL HOLDING HIS ARMS
THAT WAY I CAN FEEL HE IS REALLY MY MAN.
YOUR ALL THE MAN THAT I NEED TO BE COMPLETE
YOUR THE MAN THAT I NEED
YOU ARE MY OTHER HALF
AND YOU ARE THE MAN THAT MAKES ME WHOLE
WHEREVER WE GO WE KNOW HOW DEEP OUR LOVE IS
NOBODY CAN STEAL IT AND TAKE IT AWAY FROM US
WE SIMPLY LOVE EACH OTHER
CUZ WE WERE DESTINED TO BE TOGETHER..

MY PILLOW
A PILLOW THAT I CAN CRY ON
I CAN HIDE MY FEELINGS WITH
A PILLOW THAT KNOW EVERYTHING ABPOUT ME
I CAN SHRE MY FEELINGS WITH
YOUR THE PILLOW THAT I NEED
WHENEVER I AM HAPPY ITS ALL BECAUSE OF YOU
THAT YOU MADE ME FEEL IMPORTANT EVERYDAY
I CANNOT LIVE WITH OUT MY PILLOW
BECASUE YOU ARE EVERYTHING TO ME
YOUR THE PILLOW THAT ENLIGHTEN ME EVERYDAY
EVERSINCEI HAD YOU I CAN FEEL EVERY SINGLE SMILE IN MY HEART
YOUR THE REASON WHY I KEEP ON BREATHING
YOU ALWAYS MADE MY DAY COMPLETE
YOU ARE THE SUNSHINE IN MY MORNING AND THE SUNSET IN MY EVENING
CUZ YOUR THE PILLOW THAT I WILL NEED FOREVER

hey,ottoman thanks for the comments, Yes that was all my work i wrote that in the same day out of boredome... hummm you dont have to compete with me every writer show different ideas and meanings of what they are going to write, for me i am just very proud of my self as i can write some where in fact i am not into poem.. when i am writing something i put my self on it as a character and used those people who inspires me.. I can see in your poem your are writing with what you think, and you seems like talking in your poem, thats a good one keep it up!
foim7045we thanks a lot for your compliment and i would like to extend my gratitude to you! hummm feel great to know that an ENGLISH student like you apreciated my works. ty
now i have the inspiration again to write new one! i might post it this week if i can write..

Answer 1

it's a very nice poem if it is actually what you feel about "your man" the sentence structure flows well... good work! someone could have a very fun time writing a commentary on it

Answer 2

Not bad at all..is it all your own work ?? well done ..I am little in to poems my self ..your ones are good stuff ..i cant compete with you ..
What do you think of my one ..i written on Christmas day out of boredom ..
CHRISTMAS TREE
The little Christmas tree was born
And dwelt in open air
It did not guess how bright a dress
Some day it's bought,a tall
And grows-up fir would bear

O little Fir! your forest home
Is far and far away;
And here indoors these boughs of yours
With coloured balls and gay ,
With candle -light,and tinsel bright,
For this is Christmas day !

A dolly-fairy stands on top ,
Till children sleep ; then she
(A live one now !) from boough to bough
Goes gliding silently .
O magic sight, this joyous night !
O laden, sparkling tree !

Not good as yours ...happy new year

Answer 3

For me a poem has to have rhythm. It would not unavoidably ought to rhyme besides the indisputable fact that it desires to hit my thoughts. i imagine readability of expression is important besides. i do not favor to 2d wager what i'm studying about. I continually seem for what I time period "poetic gem stones"interior the textual content.

Answer 4

I'd be surprised if a man ever lived up to that. lol. sorry.

Answer 5

love it!!
The pillow one is cool

Answer 6

I like it !!!

Answer 7

Hmmmmmmmmm...................

Answer 8

cccute!!!

Answer 9

ok.