Its my first one - the music is really pretty, sweet, and delicate. But what do you think of the words?
Verse 1 :
Have you ever had a dream
Hidden deep within you?
Have you ever had a dream
So fictional yet so true?
Have you ever had to listen
To those people that think
It could never happen?
But yet you cant let go
Its bolted to your heart.
Refrain :
I'm gonna hold on
Till the last second
Im gonna keep reaching
for my stars
Im gonna keep hoping
That someday I'll prove you wrong
Watch me fly - fly away.
Any suggestions for the second verse? O, its talking about how so many people have dreams of doing great things someday, but somebody always convinces them it could never happen. So ya
2006-12-23 11:11:23 · 12 answers · asked by ♫ singin_gurl1200 ♫ 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Performing Arts
Hey Kelsey,
Very nice. The word "bolted" gave me a 'jolted'. Perhaps you could say ..."it's deep in your heart", just a thought. Keep writing, by they way, do we all get a free MP3 when it comes out?
2006-12-23 11:23:04 · answer #1 · answered by BuyTheSeaProperty 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
This is what you should put in it.
Can you help me find a way to make my dream come true?
baby all i need is you and that's the truth.
i have poragatives and priorities this is what i want to do.
do you belive in me too?
i need some advice and assistence help me get through this path that's in my way.
nothin's gonna stop me
watch me fly -fly away
---like it? i just made it up! i would love to hear your song when it's completed. you should mail it to me when you make your first album. try to use sophisticated words. you know like big word it makes the lyrics flow better. GOOD LUCK ;-D
2006-12-27 13:11:49 · answer #2 · answered by can'ywait2getoutofhere 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! It even sounds better once she sings it. It is really beautiful! I am soooo proud of you. This is your first song isn't it? Well good job Kelsey.Ã
2006-12-23 23:52:30 · answer #3 · answered by Erika 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i think it is Hot
second Verse
well follow through
to it hold
forget about the cold'cuz with you i will be
baby trust me
cus you held
on to this thin thread
and to you i come to you i come my loveeeeeeee
what do you think?
2006-12-23 19:21:35 · answer #4 · answered by Praiser in the storm 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love writing poems, and songs. i thought your song was beautiful. you are very artistic. if you want e mail me at makaylacook99@yahoo.com and we can talk. i can even write a poem for you on any subject, talk to you soon.
2006-12-23 19:19:03 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think you need to find another form of pastime. that didnt even make any sense or sound good at all and was boring to boot.
2006-12-23 19:24:27 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
It sounds lovely.
2006-12-23 19:18:30 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it i think its the best song eva
2006-12-23 19:14:42 · answer #8 · answered by XxSamantha SatisfactionxX 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Looks great so far, Can't wait to hear it.
^_^ Merry Christmas!!
2006-12-23 22:32:25 · answer #9 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it is beautiful can i sing it some time
2006-12-23 20:25:20 · answer #10 · answered by elm 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋