It was a cold saterday night.The day was special only one away from christmas eve.The streets were shining brightly and oh so merily.The carolers were singing.The church bells were ringing.Last minute shoppers were hurrying.I watched eager.Meager people noticed me.Then I went to bed thoughts in my head waiting for the sound of his sleigh coming my way.
2006-12-22 09:20:30 · 22 answers · asked by animefan2 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
Its great its like a mix of Allen Poe, Night Before X-mas, Know what i mean? Its cool.
2006-12-22 09:23:35 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I've got one too what do you think,
Christmas
Cold weather outside
Birds fly south to hide
Leaves turn yellow
Nights so mellow
Presents under the tree
What a suprise for we
Christmas laughter all around
Not a sad face to be found
Santa Clause comes tonight
Cozy Homes closed up tight
Wishing for some snow
The tree's all aglow
Time together
In this weather
This holiday
Time today
Christmas
2006-12-22 11:19:24 · answer #2 · answered by ♫♪♫TAY-LUR♫♪♫ 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
These people are being overly nice trying to get 10 points.
Your poem wasn't very good you used lines from other poems and you where trying to hard to make rhyme you need to focus more on the flow of the words and just take your time. Don't let this stop you from trying you have talent just keeping working on it.
2006-12-22 09:41:10 · answer #3 · answered by Rocky The Fearless 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you go to bed the day before christmas eve and wait to hear sleigh bells? no, you go to bed ON christmas eve and wait...
that and spelling, and the meager people noticing you is creepy, but a poem can be creepy, but now i'm rambling... so sorry but my vote is that your poem is not good.
2006-12-22 09:25:11 · answer #4 · answered by Bored Enough To Be Here 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It would be better if you did not repeat so many cliches from every Christmas story ever told and came up with something more distinct about Christmas in your own experience.
2006-12-22 09:24:20 · answer #5 · answered by Ape Ape Man 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Christmasey.
2006-12-22 09:25:07 · answer #6 · answered by zeroartmac 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Change I watched eager to I watched eagerly. Aside from that, great poem =)
2006-12-22 09:23:16 · answer #7 · answered by Zach S 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
That is an awsome poem. I can just picture everything in the poem in my head. It is great!
2006-12-22 09:26:48 · answer #8 · answered by Lilly 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Are you two? Because if you are, it's brilliant!! And to the girl above, post your own question!
2006-12-22 13:34:56 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Lame
2006-12-22 09:35:06 · answer #10 · answered by pessimoptimist 5 · 0⤊ 3⤋