Pls check my grammar.. I need advise for a formal letter..Thank you ;-)?

Question

Dear Mr X
,
Regarding your permit, since your contract will end on December 2006, and now your status is “not active employee ,we will discuss on this matter with the future President the Director first, FYI he will start working at our company on December 28, 2006.

And we will update to you the further information.

Answer 1

Dear Mr. X,

Regarding your permit, since your contract will end on December 2006, your status is now "not active employee" we will discuss on this matter, with the future President the Director first. FYI he will start working at our company on December 28, 2006.

We will update to you the further information.

Answer 2

I might have done better with all the details. I checked your grammar and revised some other statements to make them more clear, in my view.


Dear Mr X

Regarding your permit: Your contract will end on December 2006 and your status is currently “not active employee". Because of this, the matter must be discussed with the future President or the Director first before a decision can be made. The new President or Director starts on December 28, 2006.

We will provide you with further information [after that time] or [on/by {a certain} date].

Answer 3

I moved “the internet” to the first of the sequence. replaced some issues for the period of. at the same time as writing a study – or the different paper – do not use contractions – which includes “I’m, can’t, don’t, and so on.” good success! *market study* what's presented for sale? After an in intensity study from the internet, magazines and through vacationing the kind shops, i will see there are diverse forms of residing house leisure administration organizers which come from diverse shapes and are made with the help of a kind of fabrics. timber, metallic and fabrics are regularly occurring interior the product; besides the indisputable fact that, the market presently has no organizer with a table correct layout. *very last evaluation of the undertaking* prevalent, i'm very pleased with the way my artwork has grew to change into out. i trust that I worked nicely with my teammates in designing and making this organizer. The organizer is amazingly functional, it has a small table, a pocket that ought to shop the controllers and a base that matches magazines or newspapers. The layout is elementary and the resources are very comparatively cheap. i imagine that this layout for a house leisure administration organizer is amazingly unique as I under no circumstances seen this layout interior the market. i'm extremely pleased with this result.