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Stone Step Stairs
The leaves are falling from their tree
The sun has gone and it’s hard to see
The wind has finally caught up to be
The angels are now circling down on me
They say it’s better if I closed my eyes
I know they wouldn’t tell me any lies
So I ask them why were they here
They point to the golden gate and disappear
I make my way to the gate only to find it locked
I try to break in but everything is blocked
This can’t be how it’s suppose to be
The angles never gave me the golden key
I keep telling myself to be strong as I fight back my tears
There is nowhere to go now but down the stone step stairs
I find my way to the bottom only to come face to face eye to eye
With my innermost darkest demon waiting for me inside
Refusing in and out and everything in between
My heart stops with everything I had ever seen
I hold out my hands and drop down to my knees
I asked him, will you give me the key to the golden gate please
2006-12-20 07:24:28 · 23 answers · asked by Ct_noicS 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
it's about a person that dies. they thought they were going to go to heaven now but they get sent to hell instead.
2006-12-20 07:32:12 · update #1
6, keep it up!! glad to see some originality, a rare thing these days
2006-12-20 07:29:55 · answer #1 · answered by treetown2 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1
2006-12-20 15:27:10 · answer #2 · answered by DeeVee D. Essemar 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
5
2006-12-20 15:26:04 · answer #3 · answered by brock 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really enjoyed it it was very well written but it seems like when you get to the end that there seems to be a final verse missing you sort of want to find out if he gets the key! 9/10 for me
2006-12-20 15:31:22 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
1-10
9 :)
2006-12-20 15:26:55 · answer #5 · answered by summer ♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You should concentrate more on what you want to say as opposed to how to say it. It feels like you were trying to force a rhyme. Perhaps you should rewrite this as free verse. I think you will find it more suited for what you are trying to get across.
2006-12-20 15:28:52 · answer #6 · answered by jaden404 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i give an 8
2006-12-20 15:30:56 · answer #7 · answered by ebonee_collins 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, 8
2006-12-20 15:28:09 · answer #8 · answered by dulceamistad2003 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds depressing
2006-12-20 15:25:55 · answer #9 · answered by Robert B 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
2 or 3. poems are about telling stories with beautiful or original language. it can't just rhyme. plenty of poems don't rhyme. but what sets them apart if that in just a few words they yank us into another universe. your poem is like a segment of a peice of prose that happens to rhyme. there's nothing engaging or captivating in the language you use.
2006-12-24 03:40:15 · answer #10 · answered by Brento! 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW that is really good... i wish i could write like that,,, maybe i would get a better grade in english classes,,, your really good at writing,,, i would give that a 10 out of 10,,,,
2006-12-20 15:26:34 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋