Call An Ambulance Becuase This Love Feels Lke Murder
I'll be on the other end of the phone line, listening to the awful things you say as i hear and i start crying. Your the one person who can make me smile. but now i have a feeling that wont happen for awile. Shut my shades and consume with the dark. your the girl who broke my little heart. I lay in a bed full of tears. suicide thoughts overwhelm me. a person who used to run mind is a persn who i never want to see.
Love Is Just A Set-up For A Broken Heart..
i just wanted to mean everything to you and i'll push this so far with all my might, but i become overwhelmed as ii feel im losing this fight. but some days you have to agree we felt soo right.
Just tell me what went wrong!!
I was so confident in everything we did. but you didn;t want to co-operate so that just blew my lid. i'll change for you so you want haved too. i did everything just to fee;l right with you. this relationship is way too rough and everything i do for you is never enough.
but now i haved to face the fact that your hand will never be in mine. and that i feel i won't ever be fine. i stare at your picture and my tears are stained along the cold glass. this relationship on me has had a terrible inpact. i feel i can't breath becuase yu took the last breath right out of me. and i i want to take out my eyes so i ever wont haved to see.
and my world is a mystery, and with this gun in my hand i'll be a piece of history. so i'll kiss the end of this barrel goodbye.
Call An Ambulance Becuase This Love Feels Like Murder
2006-12-17 20:54:09 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
The lyrics are good telling the story of how you feel after being hurt, but also about making the desicion to end it all.....a little dark, but very good lyrics....you have potential.
2006-12-17 21:22:28 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
These lyrics aren't. They're very cliched. I'm just being honest with you. They're also really whiney. To write decent lyrics, you must say something in a new way or present a new viewpoint on a common situation, or at least string some words together in an unusual way.
2006-12-17 21:03:33 · answer #2 · answered by juniperflux32 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Too wordy. Cut out at least 50% of it and you'll be fine. You need a good hook that catches people's attention. You need to have a chorus that repeats the same thing over and over.
2006-12-17 21:02:56 · answer #3 · answered by Sax M 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not too bad. use the spell checker, take that depressing ending out and tell her you love her. Good luck.
2006-12-17 21:00:40 · answer #4 · answered by Willy B 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Good, revise a little and you're on the way.
2006-12-17 21:03:11 · answer #5 · answered by Iron What? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is a really good song, i would buy it.
its so sad and beautiful.
it has some strange attraction that makes me read it over n over again
2006-12-17 21:02:26 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
it's really nice but i don't know how the tune goes....
it will make everyone rock to ur lyrics
2006-12-17 21:01:05 · answer #7 · answered by *niki loves all god* 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Sounds snappy but can you dance to it?
2006-12-17 21:01:32 · answer #8 · answered by Merrin 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i like it, but i don't know how the tune goes
2006-12-17 20:58:09 · answer #9 · answered by ♀★sMiLe☆♀ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
NO !!!!! THAT IS COMPLETE S H I T !!!!!!!!!!! DONT QUIT YOUR DAY JOB AT MACCAS CAUSE U S U C K !!!!!!!!!!
2006-12-17 21:05:26 · answer #10 · answered by brianade 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋