how can you offer home
to a stranger unknown
with no map to find
the peaks of the mind
and valleys of the heart
where do you start
to glow and ascend
will purity transcend
when the concrete invades
and an abstraction fades
depression was a season
before she gave me reason
to keep connection
in this human collection
Now, I intellectualize
feelings that have no eyes
can a gift stay alive
can kindness still thrive
on the end of this vine
nothing to be mine
but only for once see
filtered eyes set free
2006-12-15 09:07:11 · 18 answers · asked by the w 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
It's crap. What are you trying to do - find a girlfriend here on Yahoo hoping she'll give a crap about your poem. Ha
2006-12-15 09:09:33 · answer #1 · answered by Chris from West LA 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
the way i understood it It doesnt sound like in that part of the peom abstraction should fade. You say concrete invades and an depression was season abrstraciton fades makes it sound like things are clearer easier to understand. I dont think thats what you were going for in the part of the poem so like you wanted to save that for the end.
2006-12-15 17:14:46 · answer #2 · answered by boyle_jm 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The depth and meaning in this collection of words
makes the poem more then well thought out
it feels as if the writers words were not only from his
head but questions in his heart..
It's beautiful
2006-12-15 17:10:57 · answer #3 · answered by e_piphany214 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds more like a rap song with all them collective rymes. LOL!!
Just kidding, its really good. and a good way to get them thoughts in your mind that you think to deep into out so u can analyze them much better.
poetry is a very soothing escape.
keep it up! you seem to have a nack.
2006-12-15 17:11:54 · answer #4 · answered by vmaxer85 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yay, I could understand almost 3/4 of the words. It was very nice
2006-12-15 17:10:01 · answer #5 · answered by Amanda 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Go head Maya Angelou!
No, but that was really good!
You could go to one of those open night poetry clubs!
That sounds like it has a lot of soul to it! Nice Job!
Krazy Libra
2006-12-15 17:10:16 · answer #6 · answered by krazy_libra_from_ac 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice idea, the poem is good not fantastic to me but good.
Good luck on the next one
2006-12-15 17:10:53 · answer #7 · answered by Thank God 4 everything 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it fits "poem" criteria, but a little deep and abstract for me... i guess i just don't really get what the poem is trying to convey.
2006-12-15 17:09:14 · answer #8 · answered by don't be rude. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great Poem,i could of never thought of that!
2006-12-15 17:09:11 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good
2006-12-15 17:09:25 · answer #10 · answered by ∂ιαиα †Matisyahu† 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋