Just want an opinion on this, not saying I did write this but be honest please bty its kinda dark..if ya know.

Question

Lost in a haze of my own despair I reach out for a hand to save me from myself,
Save me from the harsh reality of the grim future and the desolate past,
There is no light in my life of dark dismay only blackness covering a lost desperate soul,
Falling with no end in sight it seems to be infinite to the dimness or its conclusion,
Perpetual cries for the unbalance to cease go eternally with no response,
The cold and dark embraces me so and holds me diverse to the amenity and light which has caste me out,
my journey has transpired and I let go without desperation,
for the hand I desire and reach for was never there……….

ok just so you all know I am not depressed...in fact I am just fine its just the way I write but thanks for the opinions....

Answer 1

i am a college professor of english. this piece is aboslutely publishable.
if you are the author, may i offer this phrase of advice that my psychiatrist once gave me: "suicide is a permanent solutuin to a temporary problem." before you doing anything drastic, please see a psychiatrist. there is help available. i'm a LIVING testimony to this fact.
please, reach out to someone. you don't need to suffer alone.

Answer 2

Its really good. Poetry is not suppose to be rosy. Its suppose to speak truth and emotion as this does. Good poetry always touches a nerve in most people who read it with understanding. You might find it intimidating or dark but that because you like most people will notice some of your own truth in it.

Answer 3

Been there, done that,......threw me to my knees too. I had but only one way to turn, I couldn't have been any lower. But when I reached there was a hand also reaching to me..........and it was Jesus. I'm not a bible thumper, or a self-righteous person, I'm about as humble as they come.......but I did ask and I did receive.......and nothing or nobody will ever get me in that state ever again.

Answer 4

It's very expressive. Don't see it as necessarily dark, but honest. And deep. And sad. I understand the feeling.

Answer 5

I think this is the cry of a manic depressive and if you can identify with this then you would need help.

Answer 6

It's pretty good. I'll give it a seven.