"I dream about you every night
It makes me want to scream and fight
Hearing your voice in my head
Feels my heart with love and dread
Knowing your still in my life
Makes me know I can drop the knife
I don’t know how long I will last
Knowing I can’t change the past
My love for you is very strong
Please let your silence not be long
I be there for you when you’re sad
I'll will be there even when you are mad
Come with me and I will take your hand
I'll take you off to never land"
2006-12-14 14:38:33 · 27 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
certain parts of it sounds violent.... eek!!
2006-12-14 14:40:06 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I admire love poems, I write some myself. Yours is kind of corny- but sweet. Trying to win a special heart? Love is the best gift anyone could have in life. Good luck.
2006-12-14 22:41:47 · answer #2 · answered by roxylee11782 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yahh thats really nice, i dont get the knife part however. But overall very nice and id give it a 9 out of 10.
2006-12-14 22:41:16 · answer #3 · answered by chintu 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If I were the woman I would ask myself if you are a dangerous person. Knife...neverland... sounds like a graveyard poem.
Sorry, it was just my impression.
2006-12-14 23:30:21 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don`t give up your day job...
Kinda corny & childish sounding, "heard it all before" kinda feel to it.
Add some music to it to spice it & liven it up a bit maybe?
2006-12-14 22:46:41 · answer #5 · answered by Lolita Angel Rose Taylor-Kennedy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I THNICK it is pretty cool!! Listen to much Slayer??? You have definately got the 80's metal lyrics going on!!!
2006-12-14 22:45:00 · answer #6 · answered by jacah5 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow... that was incredible. Neverland is the perfect place for a couple. Trust me and Peter :]
2006-12-14 22:41:08 · answer #7 · answered by whoa_its_wendy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No offence, It sounds like a stocker
2006-12-14 22:43:01 · answer #8 · answered by 123456789 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sort of scream-ish almost like a thriller script.
2006-12-14 22:41:53 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats cute
2006-12-14 22:40:47 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it xcept the i will take u off 2 never land.......thts kinda cheesy
2006-12-14 22:40:34 · answer #11 · answered by lalalala 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋