spanish paragraph?

Question

En mi iglesia tengo muchos amigos. Cuando nosotros estamos en la iglesia, hablábamos sobre escuela, chicas, la iglesia, temas de actualidad, y fútbol Norteamericano. Pasamos mucho tiempo hablando sobre fútbol Norteamericano. Durante el partido de Michigan y OSU, todos los chicos, fue a la iglesia para mirar el partido. En Mi iglesia, tenemos un edificio para los jóvenes. En este edificio, se llama “The Box”, hay mucha tecnología. Podamos mirar el partido en una pantalla grande porque tenemos un proyector en “The Box”.

I need someone to help my son en spanish, he needs to write a paragraph about his activities with his friends at church, and I can't tell him if this paragraph is gramatically correct because I don't speak spanish, please help

this is what he is trying to say
I have many friends at church.
When we are all at church we spent a lot of time talking about football,school, girls and current events. during the game between michigan and Osu, we all went to the box to watch it on a big screen tv.

not really a tv but using a projector to show it on a wall

Answer 1

Here is what the paragraph says. I think it is correct grammatically and the spelling is also correct. However I don't know where all the accents go.

At my church, I have many friends. When we are at church, we talk about school, girls, church, current events, and football. We pass a lot of time talking about football. During the Michigan and OSU game, all of us guys went to the church to see the game. In my church, we have a building for young people. In this building, called "The Box", there is a lot of technology. We can see the game on a big board because we have a projector in "The Box."

Answer 2

a to say that could be...

En la Iglesia a la que asisto, tengo muchos amigos. Cuando nosotros estamos ahí hablamos sobre la escuela, las chicas, la iglesia, temas de actualidad y sobre futbol americano; pasamos muchos tiempo hablando de ese deporte.
Para el partido de Michigan contra OSU todos los chicos de la iglesia fuimos a verlo al edificio "the box" (la caja) donde hay una pantalla grande y un proyector.

At the church i "visit" (i don't know how to say it correctly in English) i have a lot of friends. When we're there we talk about school, girls, the church, current events and football, we spent a lot of time talking about that sport.
For the game of Michingan Vs OSU, we all went to watch it at "The box" where there's a big screen and a projector.

I hope this is useful...

Answer 3

All in all, it's pretty good! There are some pretty common mistakes, though, which are easy to fix. Show him this, if you will. :)

1. Use "a" mi iglesia instead of "en". When you say "en", it sounds more like you're talking about being inside the actual building and not the people AT church. Something more natural sounding would be, "a la iglesia mia".
2. In the second sentence, make sure your verbs agree. "Estamos" is in the present but "hablábamos is in the imperfect. Turn "estamos" into "estábamos", and you're good to go.
3. When you're talking "about" something, use "de", not "sobre."
4. Don't use "norte" when you're talking about fútbol americano.
5. Subject-verb agreement! "Todos los chicos" is more than one person, and "fue" is one for one person. Use "fueron". And re-read that sentence. In English it says, "During the game all the guys went to the church to watch the game." Sounds kinda odd, no?
6. In your church you have a building? Did you mean there's a ROOM for teenagers and stuff? If you meant room, use "cuarto". If you have buildings in your building, keep "edificio", lol.
7. "Poder" is a stem-changer, so the O changes to a U. Use the -er ending and it's "pudimos".

If you turned this in for a grade, you would've done really well. It's hard to remember verb and subject agreement all the time, and irregular verbs kill. But good job! :)

Answer 4

Maybe you could say: "Cuando nosotros estábamos en la iglesia... todos los chicos fueron a la iglesia.... En mi iglesia.... Pudimos......

I don't know what tense you are using in this paragraph. Make up your mind. Preterit or Present. The mix doesn't make much sense. ;)