Do you ever wonder
What world am I living under...
(Accoustic guitar plays)
My world took a drastic change
When you first came
The power that you've injected into me
Makes our love steady and impossible to change
(Chorus)
Oh girl,my sweet honey
I just wanna tell you
You're like my bittersweet chocolate
Brings me everlasting joy yet a little of harsh truth
But I still wanna proclaim to the world
That I will always love you....
Flowers shoot up from the cobblestones
You told me softly in a heavenly tone
That I was your Mr.Right
And a guy like me was really hard to find
I laughed and nodded my head twice
Telling you that you were really nice
(bridge)
And now we're inseparable
Our hearts bonding as one
May our love stay strong for eternity
Not anything can change it,not even money
You're my angel...baby
Your words warming my heart every minute
And now I only pray
For our burning passions for each other to stay...
Do give comments on my song and do be more lenient..coz im only 12 uh..
2006-12-14 02:31:58 · 19 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Wow your only 12 and you wrote that...that is some powerful stuff. I wish that we could hear you play it. The lyrics are really nice and powerful I'm sure your girlfriend will love it...I wish someone would write a song for me.
2006-12-14 02:35:42 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
You could do better, include more fitting words in it, words that make sense, like "Telling me im not alone, when you whisper to me in a heavenly tone..." instead of "Flowers shoot up from the cobblestones You told me softly in a heavenly tone" don't really make sense izzen it, although love itself does not make sense. Well done, man, for a 12 years old, you could do much better than this, im sure , just give your self time to grow up, and you will understand the feeling of love.
2006-12-14 03:18:43 · answer #2 · answered by jade s 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I appreciate ANYTHING that anybody ever writes...it takes talent...and you're pouring out your soul. I like it. Only thing you should change is the chorus ( all the "oh sweet honey and angel baby)....people throw words like that into songs when they cant think of something better to say...ya know? other than that, very good. I would LOVE it if my b/f wrote me a song..even if it was a remake to itsy bitsy spider :)
2006-12-14 02:51:24 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You are only 12? You did a great job, and any 12-year old girl will love it, especially if you are playing the guitar too :)
2006-12-14 02:35:17 · answer #4 · answered by duritzgirl4 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hope that I'm reading this wrong, "coz im only 12 uh," you sound like a grown man in reading the song that you wrote to your girlfriends.....it's very sweet, I'm sure she'll love it.
2006-12-14 02:35:44 · answer #5 · answered by ? 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
12? That's so adorable. Your girlfriend will love her new song. It's very talented for a 12 year old. Perhaps you should write more. Focus on your talents, take guitar lessons, and as for your girl I'm sure she will appreciate it.
2006-12-14 02:34:50 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
For a 12 yo you have an amazing concept of love. I think you should spend more time concentrating on your gift of musical talents, and less time worrying about girls!!! Because, you have a gift!!
2006-12-14 02:35:42 · answer #7 · answered by thelaundryfairy 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hey, if you're only 12, you wanna keep the burning passion in your pants?
2006-12-14 02:36:46 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I will be honest and say it is great for 12.. i am 30 and it would touch me if my bf wrote that song for me. You have talant.. I am sure she will love it!!!!
2006-12-14 02:35:23 · answer #9 · answered by Sarah G 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Considering you are 12, i think its awfully cute =)
2006-12-14 02:35:22 · answer #10 · answered by NickynJessie H 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋