Can i get a honest opinion here please?

Question

I wrote this poem for my crush
We are both seniors in highschool...
She sorta is a feminist and think all guys are uselss.. also a tomboy kinda of girl
I want her, I want to prove to her that there is a men that cares for her..

Here is the poem i wrote.. I need some feedbacks..
http://img133.imageshack.us/img133/4713/undyingpfy2.gif
should i give it to her in person, stick it into her locker(with or without my name?) or should i just forget about this idea?
Reasons please.

Answer 1

WOW.

Nice poem.
Powerful words.
Strong emotions.

Even though there are misspellings, if that is the way YOU write, the way YOU speak, leave them there.

She will know it came from your heart.

I would HAND IT TO HER. Sneaking it into her locker without your name wold only reinforce her negative feelings about men.

If you truly mean what you've written, be a man and let her know. The poem will actually be a breather for her to get over the shock of knowing what you truly feel about her. She may need that space.

About your girl: all I can say is, if she disregards your expressed emotions, you should walk away. There are far too many women who would TREASURE such sentiments and commitment.

You're a rare breed, sir, a true romanticist. Don't lose that facet.

Good luck and thanks for posting.

Answer 2

That is the sweetest thing! Where were you when I was a senior?! Anyways, I think you should express your interest in her but, not to sound negative, are you prepared to put yourself out there like that (poem w/name) in case of rejection? Are you sure you really like her or is it some sort of challenge to you to get the feminist chick? Do you even talk to her? Assuming that you do, I say you give it to her. What have you got to lose? Besides, if something goes wrong, you will be graduating soon! Good luck:)

Answer 3

As poems go, urs does not rhyme, it`s rather like a love letter, very touching tho. Have u been on a date with this girl, or r u just acquaintances ? If u`ve been dating her, just hand her the note, you`ll know by her reaction how she feels, otherwise, slip it in her locker, signed. She`ll either tell u to cool it or she will be very flattered. Either way, u need to know where u stand with her. Her feelings for u may or may not be mutual. Good Luck.

Answer 4

if shes a tomboy..does she really like mooshy stuff like love poems?

Although we all wish we could just say "hey i like you" to someone, we can't. Do you sit beside her in any classes? If you do(or if you dont make an effort to do so), leave the poem lay on top your desk with other school papers and when she sees it and says "aww you like somebody" be like "yeah you".

then again the poem seems like you want too much right away..relationships dont happen over night

hey i've got an idea ask her to go out sometime..to a movie or a basketball game or something and when you work up the nerve..say "hey i like you" or "i would really like to spend more time with you like this"

Answer 5

Scrap the poem. Its not bad its just not good either...seems like everything I've ever heard before. Why not just be who you are, regardless to what you "think" she wants you to be. Set up the mind set that you know that you are a kick a** person and she would be lucky to have you. Its sexier, in the begining at least.

Answer 6

If she's "sorta a feminist" she is going to want to shove it up your nether regions.

Feminists don't want to hear about how a man is going to carry all their burdens for them. They don't want a man that is going to handle all their pain. Feminists want equal partners, not father substitutes.

Rewrite it. Get rid of everything that alludes to her being weak (because feminists are strong). Talk about how you would like to know how it would feel facing the world as equal partners. Then post the revised version, and let us see how you really feel about a "sorta feminist" for a girlfriend.

Answer 7

nice poem... its ok if you put it on her locker. For me, don't write your name yet. Let her think or guess whos the one that is giving it onto her. Letting know that somebody cares for you can change at least and raise the spirit of a person.

If he ask you if your the one that is giving that poem onto her. Don't say YES, instead reply: "What if its me? what would you do". Listen to her answer and decide if you will say "YES its me orNO".

Goodluck!

Answer 8

Well if you really want to give it to her, why would you not put your name. If she likes it you want the credit right. Love is complicated enough, try not to make it harder for yourself. just talk to her and get it out there. The worst is she say no thanks. At least you know that you tried and that if she does say no you can get over her and get on with your life. If she does like you then your THAT much further in the game. Good Luck buddy, remember you'll never know if you don't try.

Answer 9

Women who are rabid feminists and think men are worthless will not be that impressed with a man who feminizes himself. It will only draw a cynical and condescending response from her. Let her outgrow this phase that she's in, and find someone else... and for god's sakes don't deball yourself for someone like that. It's a pathetic sight

Answer 10

i like the poem, i think it's sweet. but i would change the words "but i cannot no more..." because it's bad grammar.

i think it would be cute if you wrote her a series of poems, and didn't put your name on them, and then left her one each week stuck to her locker....like a secret lover or something....and then at the end after you have given her all of your poems, then reveal yourself and ask her out.