i wrote it to a boy that i liked and he liked me but i cant be with him for reasons
Can I trust you?
Though were just friends,
You’ve changed me in so many ways
I’m not really sure,
How I can trust a friend,
More then the one I love,
It’s hard to imagine you,
You with someone,
Who hurts you so much,
When you finally touch the face,
Of the one you love,
You feel magical,
You never want to say goodbye,
But just because you love someone,
Doesn’t mean you can be with that person,
It’s hard to imagine my life,
With out you there bye my side,
I cant see you,
I rarely get to talk to you,
Can I trust you,
How could I let you go,
Why would I want to,
I love you,
But I can’t be with you,
As I watch you softly cry,
I slowly die a little inside,
No one knows what you mean to me,
You feel as if you were an angel,
With a broken heart,
Can I trust you,
You now are in the sky,
You stare to the ground,
As im being buried,
Can I trust you,
can you with stand them
2006-12-11 12:32:09 · 27 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
As long as you write from the heart how you truly feel, it's a good poem. The fact that you took the time to write one about this guy makes it special.
2006-12-11 12:34:48 · answer #1 · answered by Jaysangl 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I feel awful to tell you this but I have noticed a weakness in your poem.
The poem tells me (as all poems tells something), that you are very domineering and in his face.
Don't get me wrong, it's a sweet poem but you've inadvertently told us that you're rather p*ssed off with this b*tch who he is snogging.
Stop writing poems and play hard to get. This way, in a week, you'll be fighting him off you with a sh*tty stick.
Good luck my love!
2006-12-11 20:38:49 · answer #2 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry,you probally worked really hard on it and every thing,but I don't really like it.I know were you're trying to get with the poem,but it doesn't make sense to me.
2006-12-11 20:37:03 · answer #3 · answered by ☼Summer☼ Gurl 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
too boring/long to even read
glanced over it and came to the conclusion: it does not rhymn
sounds like sentences just broken up to sound awkward.
2006-12-11 20:35:42 · answer #4 · answered by thank you come again 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is very touching and beautiful! This is the best poem I've ever seen. Why can't you be with him? Nothing is impossible!!!!! Maybe you will be with him some day!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
2006-12-11 20:36:13 · answer #5 · answered by Jasmine W 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A whole box of Kleenex!
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2006-12-11 20:35:08 · answer #6 · answered by John H 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cool.
2006-12-11 22:09:06 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
AWWWWWW
i <3 it
it seems sooo sad
~sniff~sniff~
i think its really good just wished i mad it up b4 u
2006-12-11 20:34:29 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think ur jus weird or something but u r jus trying to make an living i guess it would be ok......... ps:waffles =)
2006-12-11 21:07:02 · answer #9 · answered by valor 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
cool poem. You should submit it to lovepoems.com!!!
2006-12-11 20:34:51 · answer #10 · answered by izy966 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋