My love like a fire burning deep,
keeps my soul awake even though I sleep.
My body at rest,
my mind at peace.
My soul moves through,
space with grace and ease.
It flys to you and joins with yours.
it dances away all through the night hours.
My soul finds yours no matter how far,
it always finds you wherever you are.
One day it will happen,
my soul will lead.
We'll meet while awake you will see,
and upon that happy day I see,
our hearts will bind us awake or asleep.
2006-12-11 04:53:34 · 11 answers · asked by jeffrey_griswold2006 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
There is some very good imagery here, like "It dances away through the night hours" and the final line, "our hearts will bind us awake or asleep". Stick with stuff like that and change lines that sound too "everyday" (more like normal speech), like "One day it will happen" or "It always finds you wherever you are".
Nice work!
2006-12-11 05:01:51 · answer #1 · answered by Gwynneth Of Olwen 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OH MY GOD!
If a guy ever wrote me a poem like that I would totally far for him!
That's so romantic! You're good!
2006-12-11 12:57:52 · answer #2 · answered by Chia Pet 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it it is very romantic and very spiritual as well, I urge you to continue to keep writing because to me this is very beautiful.
2006-12-11 13:03:26 · answer #3 · answered by beagirl40 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG that is so sweet!!!! I think that it is pretty cool that guys still do that b/c not alot of guys still do that!!! whoever you are with is very lucky!!!!!
2006-12-11 13:00:23 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you and Golden ANgel related ?
2006-12-11 12:56:47 · answer #5 · answered by freaknastygal 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is very good. I liked it alot
2006-12-11 12:56:49 · answer #6 · answered by happy_cute_mom 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great keep up the good work
2006-12-11 12:57:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great, how lucky she is - whom you have at hearth when writing this.
Splendid!
2006-12-11 13:04:51 · answer #8 · answered by mail2chik 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Excellent....your poem says your persistant and know what you want and you will get what you want.
2006-12-11 12:57:43 · answer #9 · answered by Ivory_Flame 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's very nice.
2006-12-11 12:57:06 · answer #10 · answered by smeezleme 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋