Reality punctured with holes
She tells me to breathe
That nothing is
and nothing is make-belief
Off my tongue words tumble
Without thought
A somersault
Until she is not
anything that is possible
For once not getting caught
In candy-stripped chaos
Of lustful lips
I am real, I maintain
I flap and feel
And rain and reveal
failing to contain myself
I hunger and break
For someone else’s breathe
Awakens to take
and lay me to rest here
at my celebrated death
things I cannot
A careful hand
and strand of hair
For one moment in time
Gives reason to care
Before it tears and drops
With tears you can’t stop
Never knowing concrete
On only bustling streets
And shuffling feet
We will never meet
in reality
how can you offer home
to a stranger unknown
with no map to find
the peaks of the mind
and valleys of the heart
where do you start
to glow and ascend
will purity transcend
when reality invades
and innocence fades
depression is a season
she can see no reason
to keep connection
in this human collection
and so we intellectualize
feelings that are not wise
can a gift stay alive
can a dream still thrive
on the end of this vine
nothing to be mine
but only to for once see
unrestrained eyes free
2006-12-09 05:14:34 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
like the first one
lukewarm on the second
but keep writing :o)
2006-12-09 05:17:09 · answer #1 · answered by Tek ~aka~Legs! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is kool, you write from the heart...here is another one lol..
Words express the worlds not seen
words can capture imaginable dreams
words are songs sung from the heart
words can find a way to start
Words can touch you in different ways
words create or take away
words are shared to invisibly meet
words may take you from your feet
(c)
Happy holiday's
2006-12-09 13:33:40 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a bit iffy 2 me but u have some good words on certain parts just keep practicing
2006-12-09 13:23:52 · answer #3 · answered by lost in translation. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the 1st one better just because I think it stays more on topic but what do I know I'm only 13. No but really I applaud you with your poetry me on the other hand... let's just say it could use some work.
2006-12-09 13:21:05 · answer #4 · answered by Girlnxtdoor 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
AWESOME...
if someone u know invoked this poem from your soul
I would never say never if I were u..
"unrestrained eyes free"..... why?..r u restrained? hope u get "free" unrestrained eyes....
hope the person u wrote this 4 appreciates u...
thought it was really good..come check out my blog I have poems 2..
loss sometimes creates good poems and helps u share also ..keep it up...
I also combined them ..they made sense to me..thanks for sharing..I wish I could find..that broken angel poem..that was posted about 1 month ago...it was awesome 2...
2006-12-09 13:18:25 · answer #5 · answered by dreamy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You are making a statement of sadness, loneliness a lost and dreaming of something you know you cant have.
who and why written. the story behind the words. Do share
2006-12-09 13:20:57 · answer #6 · answered by livelovelaugh 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm lost on the first one, but I like the second
2006-12-09 13:17:22 · answer #7 · answered by bux_martinfan 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if u are going to do something with these poem u shoe copyright them cause people could take them as there.
2006-12-09 13:17:03 · answer #8 · answered by marlon G 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
get a life
2006-12-09 13:16:43 · answer #9 · answered by armond425 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pain in life is inevitable....suffering is optional........too long for me
2006-12-09 13:17:14 · answer #10 · answered by eldiablo0731 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋