could people read my story? im in year 8 and i need help with the very last sentance!?

Question

Beep beep beep’ Lucy’s alarm went off. She sat up and the beeping stopped. The movement sensors were working again. She stretched and yawned feeling, if possible, more tired than the night before. She was lucky she thought to herself. At least she didn’t have to go to school on Tuesdays and Wednesdays like the children from the past. They had learnt about that in history.
The house was silent, as she was the only one home. Her dad was at work and she didn’t have any brothers or sisters since Toby Lair had decided 20 years ago that because of the booming population families could only have one child. As she pressed the button to open the curtains, she prepared herself for what damage the acidic, poisonous rain had done to her garden. As the curtains slid to the side, she gasped. There were no flowers. No birds singing outside. There was only about 3 trees on the whole road. Unfortunately this was completely normal. She never saw flowers, birds or huge lush green foliage. Only dry soil

thats not the whole thing...it wont fit

http://hannahlsblog.blogspot.com/ has the whole thing

Answer 1

Can you place the story on the web somewhere and offer a link to the entire thing?

Answer 2

and at that moment she decided she would vote for the Green Party in every election in the future.

Answer 3

a good start

can't help with the last sentence if you say the whole thing isn't showing. i do know the last sentence that is showing is not a complete sentence.

Answer 4

just go with it the teacher will have to read it and correct it any way or just tell the teacher to help you proofread it these are the best ways to deal with this kind of stuff

Answer 5

wow! just stop! or better yet, quit school! you're hopeless!