heres another one this time dont be mean?

Question

She throws herself
on top her bed
and cries about
the day that's been
the more she thinks
the worse her thoughts
she cries and wishes
she were dead
her friends think her life
is just fine
and won't put their view
into mine
she's depressed and emo
thinks she's fat
ugly, unhealthy
and **** like that
the two best people
moved away
their daddy molested her
in seventh grade
the school day's fine
but when she's home
she locks herself
up in her room
for if she don't
he mom will fight
step dad will say
you be quiet
her feelings hurt
she starts to cry
and thinks about
what's wrong inside
in the bathroom
weeping softly
shaking, sniffling
can't stop coughing
start to panic
hard to breath
think all bout
"what's wrong with me?"
One day she
will find a rope
and tie a knot
that might bring hope
standing on the chair
looks up and smiles deeply
nothing can stop her now

Answer 1

how sad!

Answer 2

So sad, yet so beautifully phrased. If this is written by an adult about a teenager...how empathetic. If this is written by an adult about her own teen years... how lucky she is to remember so clearly what so many forget, accidentally or on purpose. If this is written by the teenager it so vividly evokes... yes there is hope. Anyone who can see and express anything this well also has the ability, if they so chose, to see the worth and even the joy in life. I hope she gives herself the chance to see that while pain and sadness are constants in life, so are joy and beauty.
I wouldn't have listened to some one my age when I was her age but I'll say it anyway: Your (especially early) teen years are always the hardest. Personally, I have a hard time trusting anyone who says they love Jr. high and high school. It does get better, really.
Oh, and i sure hope she keeps writing.

Answer 3

God loves you little one. Why be mean to yourself . Life is always going to have problems. No one is ever without them. In this life we are here to learn and grow from all of lifes events. Some will be good and some not so good. This phase will pass and you will be on your own. Take all that you've become and BE all that you can become.Many of us had pretty difficult childhoods. You can let those experiences harden you or you can use them to help someone else later on. In my life all along the way,God has put people in my life that can help me and others that I can help. We are all brothers and sisters. When you feel burdened down by your problems,go visit old people in nursing homes. A lot of times their own families have all but forgotten about them. You could bring such joy to them and receive so much love in return. When we give we always receive more in return. Eternity is a long time to be wrong. Talk to God and ask Him to direct your path and He will. Your poem is very sad but it shows you have very sensitive deep feelings. You have so much to offer. Don't be conned into wasting it.God bless you

Answer 4

Thats sad. But i imagine it is so true to life which makes it sadder. But maybe look at the rhythm of the poem b4 u publish it otherwise good.

Answer 5

Very sad, with an especially sad twist at the end.
I hope this isn't you. If you are having suicidal thoughts you should see a doctor immediately.

Answer 6

That is so sad and it is unfortunate that it has to be put in such a way for people to understand.
If this is an extract from your own feelings i am sorry that the world has made you feel this way, but please seek help.

Answer 7

I can relate. It was very sad indeed. To bad she couldn't triumph in the end instead of giving up.

Answer 8

I think you have talent for poetry, but why is this posted in Etiquette section out of curiosity?

Answer 9

the poem is great... but if this is about you, I think there's still hope -- just from reading this poem that you must be smart? Talented?
: )

Answer 10

THIS SOUNDS LIKE ITS COMING FROM THE HEART, OR FROM THE HEART OF A CLOSE FRIND.
ALL IS NOT LOST, YOU WILL FIND A WAY