Our role in this relationship, as we spoke of, is more reactive then proactive pursuant.
2006-12-04 03:14:43 · 7 answers · asked by tmvminjh 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
Appreciate all of your feedback. The situation is that I have been trying to tell my boss that this sentence doesn't work and that it should not be used in a letter he wants to send to clients. However, he didn't believe me for some reason... not sure why he hired me if he can't believe or trust me. Maybe he will believe you all.
2006-12-04 03:37:46 · update #1
Simply put, it needs to be rewritten...it is just too unclear.
2006-12-04 03:26:49 · answer #1 · answered by blktiger@pacbell.net 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is not a complete sentence--should identify pursuant to something
2006-12-04 11:21:43 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's easier to ask what isn't wrong with it. "Then" should be "than". "Pursuant" to what? Sorry, but it's all wrong.
2006-12-04 11:28:01 · answer #3 · answered by Bryn T 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I tried to find what you want to say ,but can not find out what you mean.
2006-12-04 11:24:55 · answer #4 · answered by lucky s 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This sentence uses the wrong "then", it should be "than".
2006-12-04 11:22:57 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
too many commas well not really but reword it like like "Our role in this relationship, like we have said,....blah blah blah
2006-12-04 11:22:57 · answer #6 · answered by Grapes 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
structure problem
2006-12-04 11:24:02 · answer #7 · answered by RoCk 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋