it makes me smile, it makes me laugh, jim bean, jack daniels, you're such a blast, it makes me open, it changes my mood, it takes it away, and makes it good, it makes the boys smile,and like me more, i'm on top of the world, what more could i ask for? so i sip and sip some more awhile, cause i want to laugh and i want to smile, i sip and sip and sip and sip, until a drunken sleep i slowly slip, and then i wake up, and all is gone, except my problems, they still live on, jack daniels, jim bean, you're all such fakes, cause i feel like sh)t when i awake. my stomach churns and my head aches, and i can barely walk for goodness sake. i feel dizzy, i think i'll vomit, i see the toilet, i'll sit on it. i'll down the pepto and try to sleep it way, my oh my what a sh)tty day. i had a blast and i had fun, but in the morning i can't face the sun. the drink won't forever rid my problems, so i guess another way is how i have to solve them.
2006-12-04 03:06:40 · 4 answers · asked by Yvette S 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
Very good and well thought out. I like it.
2006-12-04 03:13:30 · answer #1 · answered by flutterby 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like this poem, it is unique and I had to smile and marvel at the honest description of the "feel good" enjoyments due to the transforming effects of the alcohol during usage. Equally honest is the description of the next day's residual difficulties. Part of the personal revelation at the end of the poem is whether the end result (the hangovers etc) is worth the temporary enjoyable escapes (after all the problems remain after the indulgence). The poem is a combination of personal exhilaration and regret but is described with a skillful well-crafted talented prose. I also like that the ending is sorta ambivalent ("I guess") - the Jack Daniels/Jim Beam delights & suffering may continue for a while or a practical new path may be taken right away to solve life problems without those magical elixirs.
2006-12-05 14:32:31 · answer #2 · answered by sunshine25 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
can not say I liked this one. Now once you chop back up it and finished 2 separate poems, then they may be rather sturdy. you have not any fluent transition between your 2 separate suggestions, Candles and timber. You off relating the timber as basically a sizeable equipment of sticks after which pass on in a wayward path and don't extremely grant the innovations mutually cohesively. easiest the standard 2 Stanzas examine with candles and the 0.33 stanza (which i've got faith is your transition) desires artwork. The wood section basically did not make experience to me in any respect. Sorry, that's basically my beneficial complaint and not meant to be propose. would desire to you write some element that I extremely basically like, i will permit you recognize as i've got interior the previous. This one basically did not do it for me.
2016-12-18 07:12:56 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
cant be borvered to read this next time write less lol
2006-12-04 03:10:32 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋