Is this a good intro? Do I need to work on it? If so how do I make it better?
Many Americans today are unable to afford healthcare do to what seems to them a high cost. Universal healthcare is a feasible solution to keep the people’s health problems from becoming worse regardless of income. It will make the way of life for many become more worth while due to better health. The reason that Universal healthcare is not currently used is because many politicians do not realize the benefits that it would bring to this country.
2006-12-03 10:21:57 · 3 answers · asked by Avatar89 4 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
"Many Americans today are unable to afford health care due to high cost. Universal Health Care is a feasible solution to keep the people’s health problems from becoming worse regardless of income. It will make the way of life for many more worth while due to better health. The reason that Universal Health Care is not currently used is because many politicians do not realize the benefits that it would bring to this country."
There you go.
2006-12-03 10:26:40 · answer #1 · answered by x_southernbelle 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
change do for 'due', and maybe cut out the end, save the explaining for the body, because you've got the thesis right before that.
2006-12-03 10:27:35 · answer #2 · answered by Liam R 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
The just of it is ok, assuming this is an essay [tell them what you're going to tell them, tell them, summarize what you told them]. But you need to check your grammer do vs. due, etc.
2006-12-03 10:25:31 · answer #3 · answered by S T 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋