Great start! You are definitely on the right track. A thesis statement doesn't necessarily have to be only one sentence. Here's an alternative that might get a little bit more to the point:
Many of today's Americans are unable to afford the high cost of healthcare. Universal Healthcare, a government-run plan which affords healthcare to all Americans regardless of income, may be a feasable solution to this problem.
Good luck!
2006-12-03 05:44:31
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answered by wonderwoman 3
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I dont like.."would be a good thing." at the end.
Try this: Due to the rising costs of healthcare, many families don't have healthcare; which is why universal healthcare would be a much better substitute.
2006-12-03 05:38:54
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answered by Anonymous
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Sounds like a good start. Maybe see if there's a way to say it without using the word healthcare three times in one sentence.
2006-12-03 05:37:59
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answered by baldisbeautiful 5
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though i dissagree with the statement...thats not the point:
try not using "healthcare" so much:
Due to it's high costs, many families cannot afford healthcare, universal healthcare would solve this.
try that...
2006-12-03 05:39:34
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answered by lord_beaver@sbcglobal.net 2
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try to be extra certain, placed your substantial paragraph matters on your thesis actuality. as an get mutually Mass production, advance of inhabitants, progression of technologies, baby exertions, advance of tuberculoses, and pollutants are the functional and negative consequences of the business Revolution. No, you don’t %. an aspect. attempt now to not be bias purely write about the negative and sensible consequences. on your paragraphs, you topic sentence should be something like this, of direction it relies upon what you picked as your consequences. Mass production is a good results of the business Revolution because (say why it became a good result). After your topic sentence, educate your topic sentence with information from resources which includes your e book or a piece of writing on the internet. What ever you take advantage of, cite your resources.
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answered by ? 4
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actually universal healthcare is a good idea..
2006-12-03 05:37:14
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answered by Anonymous
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i would write in this way: due to high cost of health care, many families don't have this opportunity, which makes us consider the idea about universal health care. :)
2006-12-03 05:41:12
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answered by zoe 2
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That is good, you are taking a position. Now, back it up.
2006-12-03 05:37:36
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answered by GiGi 4
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