I, a Japanese, composed the following flyer for the Thank You Party for Our Teacher. I would appreciate it if you would correct my English. Thanks
Date : Tuesday, December 19 (the last class)
Time :5:00 PM -
Location : Near Tokyo Station
Venue : Restaurant to be informed as soon as fixed.
Cost :Split with students, subject to adjustment due to drinking volume
Others : Any language allowed during eating
Please put your name down below
Will Attend.Will Not Attend.
Coordinator : Kojiro Smaura
2006-12-02 08:49:16 · 6 answers · asked by Taro K 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
It's very understandable in its present form. This is what I'd write:
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Date : Tuesday, December 19 (the last class)
Time :5:00 PM - ???
Location : Near Tokyo Station
Venue: Restaurant to be selected based on the number of attendees.
Cost : Food and non-alcoholic drink tab will be split among students. Alcohol to be paid for individually
Other Information: Any language is allowed during eating
Name:
Will Attend________Will Not Attend________
(check one)
Coordinator : Kojiro Smaura
2006-12-02 09:39:45 · answer #1 · answered by ZenPenguin 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Next to "Venue" write: Restaurant TBA (which means "to be announced." I'm not sure what you mean when you say "subject to adjustment due to drinking volume." Do you mean "Cost will be based on the amount each person drinks"? What is "Others"?
Maybe you mean "Other" without the "s". Do you mean that students may converse in any language during the meal?
2006-12-02 16:57:39 · answer #2 · answered by happygirl 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your English is very good. You don't really need any corrections.
You might say "Restaurant to be decided, attendees will be notified."
Cost: split between students, drinks not included.(or cash bar)
Other: any language allowed during meal.
Please return with Will / Will Not Attend.
2006-12-02 17:03:33 · answer #3 · answered by Crash 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is good, just a couple of suggestions: I would say:
Venue: restaurant to be advised as soon as decided
Cost: split between students. Pay for own drinks.
I wish I could speak your language as well as you speak and write mine! Happy holidays.
2006-12-02 16:55:52 · answer #4 · answered by ladybird 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I agree with Ladybird, including the last sentence.
One note, Americans will sometimes use the phrase, "A pay-as-you-go bar will be available".
Have a great party...
2006-12-02 18:12:55 · answer #5 · answered by gimpalomg 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Congratulations, you have done very well. Couldn't have done it better myself.
2006-12-02 17:30:29 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋