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High School. English II

Love
Are aspects of life that are unexplainable nonexistent?
No my darling, for how would love be real?
Not able to be explained, yet the greatest emotion felt
Love is heavy, yet love is light
Yet in the end it brings us flight
Gives us wings, helps us rise
Leaves us pleased, until we die

Do we always know if love has caught us?
No my darling, for Cupid shoots arrows when we are unsuspecting
Love is found in the strangest of places
And cannot be attained by choosing faces
For love cannot be achieved
But rather is the mood sensed when living without the other is unfeasible

Can you ever fall out of love?
No my darling, for once you have experienced true love
You always will love that person
Love has no past, yet a present and a future
You either once loved and still do
Or the love that you “felt” was a fiction of your imagination
Love forever, don’t deny, and cherish deeply, until you die

2006-12-01 10:29:33 · 11 answers · asked by fashionistaqt 3 in Entertainment & Music Polls & Surveys

sophomore...english 2

2006-12-01 10:33:50 · update #1

11 answers

Your commas should be line breaks.
they would be much stronger
and the quotations on "felt" refers to a metaphor?
if so,
i would try and break it into a stanza
make a picture of "felt" that would flow with your poem
those are all just sugesstions.
good luck =]

2006-12-01 10:33:51 · answer #1 · answered by sss_underrehabilitation 1 · 1 1

8 out of 10

2006-12-01 18:31:28 · answer #2 · answered by Eunice M 4 · 0 1

English teacher will like it. Personally as a grade 9 it looks like you tried to hard.

Above avredge.

2006-12-01 18:31:17 · answer #3 · answered by Cloudyheartgurl 3 · 0 0

that's good, exept unexplainable and nonexistent are kinda big words for a poem

2006-12-01 18:32:29 · answer #4 · answered by altmetal4christ 3 · 0 1

9.5

wise words, some real truth there

huge insight for a high school student

2006-12-01 18:32:48 · answer #5 · answered by kurticus1024 7 · 0 1

it was ok, but like that other girl said it looked like u tried to hard not from the heart

2006-12-01 18:33:06 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1 0

I would give you an B+...very pretty but a bit mushy and long...also needs more "Lilt".

2006-12-01 18:33:45 · answer #7 · answered by jesshispet 3 · 0 1

mediocre...lacks substance and style, too incoherent...not really a poem...if your going to rhyme...rhyme. If not then don't rhyme at all. overall Grade : C-

2006-12-01 18:36:05 · answer #8 · answered by Pie's_Guy 6 · 0 1

That is very good!!! I could never really write poetry, so thumbs up to you!

2006-12-01 18:31:37 · answer #9 · answered by me 6 · 0 1

8.5 to 9.0, proboly an A to A-

2006-12-01 18:32:19 · answer #10 · answered by master_jet_trooper 1 · 0 1

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