Key to Your Heart
What was to me just a simple key,
Stolen out of cute flirtation
Would evolve into much more
A feeling – a thought – a small sign
A symbol of what you would steal from me
My heart
You would steal my heart
and every emotion hence forth
My attention and care
now devoted to you
Now my subject of thought
My muse of mind
My absolute adoration
Which I willingly show
Now entranced with the idea of your affection
You my source of laughter
My source of happiness
My source of glee
This all devoted to you
My Cutie Pie ( that's you :) )
NOTE: Posted this a while ago, but now I added the last stanza and am calling it finished. Any tips, comments, or suggestions?
2006-11-23 00:06:31 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
awesome!100%perfect~
2006-11-23 00:16:42 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
This poem is amazingly good for a beginner, there is defiantly some advantageous imagery in it, inspite of the undeniable fact that it sorts of lacks direction, its somewhat confusing, it starts off with you happy you have got here upon somebody, yet they are no longer somewhat yours? and then they flow away, this is a superb storyline, yet you could want as an occasion a think approximately the poem whilst they leave. It would not somewhat rhyme in places, which i do no longer blame you for, rhyming poems are very very complicated, so maybe you ought to easily attempt non rhyming poems initially. in case you like the belief of rhyming nonetheless, attempt purely making it lyrical whilst spoken, counting the syllables consistent with line is a good thank you to try this. Poetry could nicely be exciting and intensely gratifying, i think of you ought to proceed, it is likewise possible to make some money! yet you could desire to purchase a e book on writing poetry to somewhat get the final consequences, i prefer to propose "the ode much less travelled: unlocking the poet interior" via Stephen Fry, he's astonishing and and intensely beautiful.
2016-10-17 10:41:58 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is incredible!! I enjoy it a lot! You should continue your poem writing life because your writing is just wonderful! If I could I would take claim for it, but that is cruel and wrong! ( you did the work, you deserve the credit) To sum this up, that poem was awesome! Great job!
2006-11-23 00:18:00 · answer #3 · answered by sydney z 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Lose the Cutie pie.
2006-11-23 00:51:54 · answer #4 · answered by trini_rocker 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think It's a wonderful Poem. eep writing and get better^^
20/20
2006-11-23 00:14:21 · answer #5 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ah this poem is so sweet. i got to say 10 outta 10..well done*high 5*
2006-11-23 00:12:55 · answer #6 · answered by SimileyDaisy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What are you, a woman or something? Write a poem about fights and fighting.
2006-11-23 00:15:42 · answer #7 · answered by people are scum 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
7/10 it was allright
2006-11-23 00:11:24 · answer #8 · answered by Ryan1313 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
great very emotional 7/10
2006-11-23 00:08:09 · answer #9 · answered by younglakshmimittal 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Wonderful :) i'll give an 8
2006-11-23 00:08:37 · answer #10 · answered by Clemence 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋