What do you think of The End of Dreams?

Question

The End of Dreams

When I fall asleep at night, it's like my dreams are life
Filled with demon frights or everything is right
Then, in beams the light, open my eyes again
The clock and sunrise tell me that time was spent
But I, within, feel as if I only blinked
Then zone and sink into my pillow, take a moment to think
If only a link could connect my whole consciousness
Free trade in my brain instead of a cold armistice
Would I still be wanting this world that I wake up to
Would I still ache for you, or would I create a new
Whole place of beauty, just according to me
With the ideal self replacing what I normally see
But seeming as normally as the, or would it be a nightmare
Like a failed heist then being sliced by inmates who don't fight fair
Plight always right there, never can escape it
Like being forced to fight bears unarmed and buck naked
Fear floods, my blood races, but got work, got classes
So I must stop asking questions without answers

Answer 1

I like the idea, but the conclusion comes without hint so that needs a bit of work. If it's intended as a poem, I'd flesh it out a bit and be sparser on words with the result of creating more room for the reader's imagination.

So you could open like: Asleep, where dreams live...

because it does not really matter whether it's day or night when you dream or do you dream differently during the day when napping or something? But otherwise this is a good way of 'dreamcatching'. I at least notice too that time moves differently when I sleep and dream, mostly like accelerated.

Answer 2

Did you write that? If you did...Wow! Very interesting work about what would happen if we could live in our dreams and control them. I enjoyed reading this peice, get published somewhere if you wrote it!

Answer 3

I think it is a great new druid only weapon!

Answer 4

how do you know you aren't in a dream right now????