WHAT DO YOU THINK OF THiS POEM????????

Question

Take a razorblade to my head and scratch my eyes out.

Dig until you hollow me out.

Find what makes me tick.

Empty me.

Satisfy me.

Make me physically what I feel inside,

empty,

drained of emotion,

apathetic,

without a care, except a self-loathing.

I am but an ugly unbearable imperfection.

Kill me

Numb that aching, thobbing heart of mine.

Thrust in the dagger that I've placed where my heart should be.

Give me what I deserve

for the pain I've caused,

for the pain I enjoy giving.

For I am heartless,

sadistic at best.

I am the devil reincarnated.

Rip me to shreds

and defile me like the Mussolini I am

Answer 1

its cool, but im just wondering; do you really feel that way? i was just wondering. but besides that i really liked your poem. wierd though. but neat.

Answer 2

I think Robert Frost said it best that a good poem is never about what it appears to have been written about.

Your slam style of bringing the words right to the forefront, with no other possible interpretation, would fit better in a song than a poem.

The poem also has no iambic meter, and the rhyme scheme is non-existent.

I am sorry, but I would not classify this as a poem in any traditional way. It more like a freeform expression of angst that you have written down, and that, my dear, is not poetry.

My $.02

Answer 3

I really like it. It's deep; I understand it. Or maybe not understand it? Perhaps what I get from it is completely different from the meaning you see, but no matter. I think that if everyone looked hard enough they could all get something from your words. Eyes that look are common; eyes that see are rare. I admire the way you put your thoughts on paper. It all fits together quite nicely.

Answer 4

Frightening!!! You express yourself really well, however, I find no pleasure in reading your poem. It is too painful. Are you speaking of yourself? If this is how you really feel, get help!-- Seriously!! If you are going for shock value, just stop! Redirect your efforts to reflect a sane mind, you'll be taken seriously and appreciated more.

Answer 5

It's not a poem, but it's expressive writing. It's nice. It was a fun to read. I like your writing. I think you're very good at it. Keep it up!

Answer 6

Wow! Do you really feel this way? You express yourself beautifully, but if you really are this hallow and hurting this much inside, what's behind all this and are you going to talk to someone about it? God bless you my child.

Answer 7

Not much, too dramatic. Nothing left to the imagination.

Answer 8

EMO........but i dont feel bad for u at all because attitude is evrything and if u change ur atitude, ur life will get better.....

Answer 9

its a nice poem

Answer 10

very sad and depressing :(