Please read my poem and give me your honest opinion!!!?

Question

You still loved................

In the beginning, she was the only thing only thing on your mind, you wouldn't take any chances of losing her.
But once love came along you knew she would never leave, because what you had was special. So you didn't have to try as hard any more to keep her.
The flame still burned but not as high
You still looked into her eyes but not as deep
You still held her hand but not as tight
You always wanted to hear her voice like you did in the beginning but you didn't call anymore
Instead of being her loving night in shining armor, you were a junior high crush in tin foil
You still say i love you and you still meant it, but its not as convincing
You would still walk through fire for her, but you would think twice before you did it.
But one day she looked into your eyes and it caught you, your heart skipped a beat, your hands sweat, chills ran down your back, and you realized why you chose her in the first place, and now thats why your in love.
You realized all you did wrong and you take her in your arms. And you promise that you'll always love her.
The flame still burns but now twice as high
You looked into her eyes but now you get lost in them
you hold her hand so tight she wanders if you'll ever let it go
you always make sure her voice is the last one you hear before you go to bed at night.
Your her night in shining armor, but with gold around the edges.
And everytime you say you say i love you, she knows you'll always always be there.

Answer 1

Wow thats awesome. Well done, makes me wish someone had written it for me.

Answer 2

wow, that's nice. I actually could relate to it. About a month and a half ago my bf was not the same as usual. We grew apart and we even almost broke up a few times but then we had a talk and we realized how much we missed each other. Now we both are trying really hard to make this work because we're in love and we can't see ourselves with somebody else. This poem really resembles what happened with us and i think that the poem is just amazing.

Answer 3

this is surprising! The imagery is eerie and haunting. I see this guy you're talking approximately. jogs my memory of the guy I see sitting on my own on the bar, ate up in himself, oblivious to what's occurring around him. even although fairly depressing, it does tell a tale of maximum of people. His existence is tragic or maybe although he can spark a grin right here and there, everybody around him can see his inner Hell. i ask your self if he think of he's fooling us with those grins or is he too numb to care. any such sluggish suicide. Bravo! via the way, this could be great lyrics to a music. something like Alice in Chains might have executed. Or Nirvana.

Answer 4

At first i thought love has lost that zing which happens in most relationships but by the end was really glad you realised you had found the true love of your life. lucky you

Answer 5

Are you a pro? This touched my heart. Thumbs up. No matter what anyone else tells you this is a great poem.

Answer 6

It was a pretty good poem, but it needs more of a fire beneath it, it got kinda boring.

Keep it up

Answer 7

Beautiful. Loved it! Anymore?

Answer 8

This is a great poem I really like it, and it is the truth. You should write a book.

Answer 9

that is very nice,really i enjoyed it!thank-you! one thing though and just F.Y.I.there are some grammatical errors(knight,not night and mean not meant) but as far as the prose itself its lovely!!

Answer 10

That is very nice. Did this happen to you? It sounds so real that it must be a true tale.