I'm going to put this poem before class starts and while nobody is there. This is to prevent anyone from seeing who put it. As for people reading it nobody really cares about that stuff. Also it will be addressed to her but my name won't be written and shes always sitting in the same place since the beginning of the year. Also tell me how i should decorate the poem. I have an idea but i want other opinions.
When I think of the perfect girl
You are the only one that comes to mind
With the intelligence of a genius
Eyes of an angel
Hair of a saint
And a laugh that lights up a room
No wonder you are God’s only work of art
You’re an amazing girl, an amazing person
You’re special and irreplaceable in my heart
2006-11-15 04:25:49 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I think you should just change it a little. I think you should have said a smile that lights up the room or a laugh that brightens your life.
And don't worry not all poems rhyme.
2006-11-15 04:51:24 · answer #1 · answered by vhat40 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would print it on some decoeated paper you can get nice ones from office max or you can get some at like pacatans and then take it with you to print on. It sounds nice would be a little better if it ryhmed
the perfect girl with eyes from an angel
has got my heart in a tangel
with hair of a saint and the laugh of light
no wonder you and god are tight
you are an amazing woman to me
and irreplacable you will stay
see how a ryhme can bring together each sentence.
And you never call a girl a girl esspecially when you are doing something like this you allways call her a woman.
2006-11-15 04:43:37 · answer #2 · answered by rainamem 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Anyone who says "don't poems have to rhyme?" please take a poetry class in school. Rhymes tend to be considered cliche' sometimes. Plenty of famous poets don't have any that rhyme. It should just flow well.
I like his poem though I agree with the "hair of a saint" line....don't like that to well.
I think it's a sweet gesture. Give it to her only if know she likes romantic sweet things.
But one idea is if you have the guts, sometime if there is a free time in class or before class where you could talk to her and if you sit next to her ask "hey, your a girl...do you think this would get a girls attention if it was left for her?" If she says "yeah, that's really nice" then the next day or week leave it on her desk before class and suprise her that it was really for her. If she doesn't seem to enthused about the idea or says no on some level then for her...it's a bad idea. And wait alittle while and come up with a more direct way of telling her you like her.
Good luck.
Oh, and don't listen to those macho guys who say your gay for writing poetry or it's corny. They just need to learn about life and hobbies and romance more. Lyrics are a form of poetry, is every band out there gay because they write lyrics? No....
Girls like romance. I've kept every poem/song my ex gave me years ago.
2006-11-16 07:51:59 · answer #3 · answered by Jenny 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmm...I would change a couple of things. I'm not sure Saints were famous for their great hair, since a lot of them were in holy orders that didn't bathe. Sounds like she's religious, if that's the case, no problem. (If she's gothy, I'd think again! LOL!)
I always had a lot of luck with teenage love poetry, especially if the girl really is a thinker. Read a little Lord Byron and you can flesh this thing our nicely.
2006-11-15 04:32:03 · answer #4 · answered by texascrazyhorse 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
no good!
girls are not impressed by poetry no matter where the realationship is. you would be better of (if at all) to memorize it and say it to her in the flesh.
also- make sure if your going to mention god that shes a god loven person or else your gana get a blank face. what you could do is tell her the truth and take it from there. be calm, be dry (as in don't sweat) and be your self- but above all DONT LIE!! about anything- well, maybe about your weight if its not too much.
(0,X) but if she rejects you! keep it cool and don't ignore her after the fact- girls talk and if your a jerk with one most likely youll be a jerk to all.
2006-11-15 04:34:49 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
u might freak her out... try something simpler maybe? like umm.. could you tell her to her face that you like her? that would be a lot better. I like the poem. not the best I've ever heard definatly but it comes from the heart but the thing with "hair like a saint" doesn't really work. and also, don't decorate it! that's tacky. just type it out to show you spent time and put it in an envelope with her name on it. good luck! you sound like a great guy!
2006-11-15 04:32:11 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well for one it is alot better if you gave it to her in person. That way for will kow for sure if she likes you back. Cause if she sees and reads the poem and doesn't know who it's from, she might go to someon else besides you thinking they did it. So be a man and go for it the worse that could happen is a word that is familiar to everyone in the world, and it's No. and lie goes on
2006-11-15 04:30:58 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
i'm a woman. i'd say that if somebody placed that on my table i'd pass loopy. this is this type of captivating poem and any woman who does not delight in does not deserve a guy such as you.
2016-10-15 14:12:51 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
well all i can say is try. i have dated guys before. they got my attention by poems too. maybe she is the kind of girl who likes sensitive guys. i hope so. guys like you are the best kind. GOOD LUCK!
2006-11-15 04:29:33 · answer #9 · answered by smileygirl 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
romantic but aren't poems suppose to rhyme
2006-11-15 04:27:57 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋