thank you every one who read my first poem...
this is my next one...
to feel,to hold,to touch,
the feelings i have,
are too much,
what are these emotions i feel,
is this love?is this real?
i cant sleep,
my mind wont rest,
this feeling is amazing,
it is the best,
to hold you in my arms,
this very night,
is all i ask,
you are my light.
thank you for taking time to read this one too x
2006-11-09 13:59:37 · 18 answers · asked by Lydia K 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
absolutely mesmerizing and beautiful.. very touching ='')
2006-11-09 14:17:46 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
not all poems rhyme n the best 1s usually dont tho its not a bad poem could make a good eulogy im sure a loved 1 would be pleased with this keep writing them as a poem is to spark emotion in a person and this obviously doesz to sum people
2006-11-10 00:06:37 · answer #2 · answered by zoomer2001uk 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
agh! no! you need to use METAPHORS to make your poems interesting!!!
you are hot though.
THIS is a good love poem:
"Bright star, would I were steadfast as thou art
Not in lone splendour hung aloft the night,
And watching, with eternal lids apart,
Like nature's patient sleepless eremite,
The moving waters at their priestlike task
Of pure ablution round earth's human shores,
Or gazing on the new soft-fallen mask
Of snow upon the mountains and the moors;
No yet still steadfast, still unchangeable,
Pillow'd upon my fair love's ripening breast,
To feel for ever its soft fall and swell,
Awake for ever in a sweet unrest,
Still, still to hear her tender-taken breath,
And so live ever or else swoon to death." - keats
2006-11-11 12:38:42 · answer #3 · answered by General P 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Yes,I like that much better than the first one.I wasn't too keen on the rhyming poem.This one is concise too,and you get more feeling from it...sounds like you're smitten!
2006-11-09 22:17:38 · answer #4 · answered by ? 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
man your poems are horrible. they lack creativity and seem to be a product of a fifth grade writing class.
2006-11-10 22:25:12 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
fab poem well done. Also you look cute in your pic well done for that too
2006-11-10 04:34:27 · answer #6 · answered by Richard K 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Oh no thats the worst poem ive ever heard ...... completly awfull ......... ha ha just kidding its cool .
2006-11-09 23:37:44 · answer #7 · answered by badass-mofu 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Previous answerer said it should be put to music and it should
2006-11-09 22:07:40 · answer #8 · answered by william john l 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Definitely good for song lyrics!
M :)
2006-11-09 22:01:41 · answer #9 · answered by mesmerized 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
lovely good work as your dad if he know any good advanced hynother in london im in wimb.
2006-11-09 22:11:28 · answer #10 · answered by sexygirl 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋