Can someone read my conclusion sentence and tell me if I used proper grammar/punctuation?

Question

The Pre-Kindergarten program introduces children to school, interacting, and basic Kindergarten knowledge earlier ; when kindergarten begins, teachers will be able to teach children more than what they have in the past.


It's only supposed to be one sentence, which is why I used the semi-colon so it wasn't a huge run-on. Is it okay? If not, how do I fix it?

Answer 1

You do not state to what the word earlier is comparing pre-kindergarten.

It is hard to write a summary sentence without knowing what came before it. Nevertheless, perhaps something like this might work:

The pre-Kindergarten program enables children to be introduced to school and to learn interaction skills at an earlier age than if the children were to being their schooling in Kindergarten, while also providing extra class time that allows teachers to teach more lessons (or choose another word such as "information" or "materials" or "skills").

Answer 2

I would do away w/ the semi-colon and use the word "therefore".

The Pre-Kindergarten program introduces children to school, interacting, and basic Kindergarten knowledge earlier, therefore, when kindergarten begins, teachers will be able to teach children more than what they have in the past.

It draws a conclusion much more clearly than the semi-colon.
Hope this helps.

Answer 3

The Pre-Kindergarten program introduces children to school, interacting, and basic Kindergarten knowledge earlier, therefore, when kindergarten begins, teachers will be able to teach children more than what they have in the past.

Adding 'therefore' relates the two sentences and they can easily be one main sentence.
I hope this helps.

Answer 4

Your sentence is confusing. It doesn't matter how long the sentence is; just be sure that it's clear to the reader. I would change it to -
The Pre-Kindergarten program introduces children to the concept of school (interacting with other children, sitting still for extended periods of time, working on a schedule, etc.), but it also allows for kindergarten teachers to provide more advanced instruction than has occurred in the past.

Answer 5

Okay, kiddo, here goes:

1)What you have here is a run-on — you have two sentences here glued together with a semicolon. Not good. If you need to say all of this in one sentence, then you will need to revise your wording to accommodate everything within one sentence. When you use the semicolon to bind two sentences together — to avoid using a period — you STILL have two sentences, and have thus created a run-on. Semicolons are generally used to divide lists or thoughts that are otherwise separated by commas to make the reading less confusing.
2)Your semicolon — if you needed to use one — should come directly after the word “earlier” with no space between the two. Perhaps you could use “Spell Check”?
3)Without having read the entire document/report, it is difficult to determine if this is a “good” summary statement for it or not. In general, I would say it is lacking in thought and content — let me explain further:
Regarding the first of the two sentences:
“The Pre-Kindergarten program introduces children to school,” is okay — it is good...
The term “interacting” alone is not so good — it does not explain what the children are “interacting” with. A better way to state this would be “social interacting”, “social interactions”, or something to indicate the TYPE of interactions you are referring to. Otherwise the reader might misconstrue your intent to be something entirely different!
The end of the first sentence, “and basic Kindergarten knowledge earlier” is also lacking definition. “Earlier” than WHAT? “Earlier” than WHEN? Perhaps a better term to use here would be simply “early”. “.... Introduces children to.... .... basic Kindergarten knowledge early.”
Regarding the second of the two sentences:
“When kindergarten begins, teachers will be able to teach children more than what they have in the past.” Is actually discussing an entirely different “place”. Either you are summarizing “pre” Kindergarten, or you are summarizing “the beginning” of Kindergarten...
AND... IF children are just beginning Kindergarten, what have the teachers taught them in the past? This part of the sentence indicates that the children have received some past teachings from the teachers.

Perhaps a better sentence here would be something like: “Children who attend the Pre-Kindergarten program are better equipped to enter Kindergarten; which can leave the teachers free to teach them more during the year than would be possible without the advanced learning provided by this program.” ... or something similar.

4)In my professional opinion, a better summary statement — in one sentence — (based on the information available) would be something like this:

“The Pre-Kindergarten program introduces children to the school environment; which includes, but is not limited to: social interacting, basic Kindergarten knowledge, fundamentals of classroom order, following rules, etc., and can provide Kindergarten teachers with the opportunity teach the children more during the Kindergarten school year than would be possible without the lessons taught by this program.”

Answer 6

Here's a suggestion:

"The pre-kindergarten program introduces children to school, helping young students get an early start in interaction and basic kindergarten concepts; furthermore, teachers will now have an expanded curriculum to teach children more once kindergarten begins."

I'm sure you can get a better idea after reading other suggestions... Good luck!

Answer 7

it is fine as it is. However, if you wanted to, in stead of the " ; " you could put in the words "so that". That way it is one sentence.
Another thing you could do to shorten it is this,:
"...introduces children to those of their own age and the basics of school earlier so when Kindergerten begins, teachers will have more time to teach the important skills."

This is just an option, and this is your conclusion. Do what you think sounds good, but to the point..

Answer 8

No. It should be two separate sentences. And you need to clarify your statements a bit. "When kindergarten begins, teachers will be able to teach children more than what they (Who?) have in the past." That sentence sounds confusing and not well-written.

Answer 9

In my humble opinion it is a bit long and choppy. I might condense it in the following way:
"The Pre-Kindergarten program introduces students to an educational and social environment, so that they will be better equipped to receive instruction in Kindergarten and the years following."
I think my sentence may be even longer. So who am I to say your sentence was long? I'm very sorry. Please forgive my sentence structure snobbery.

Answer 10

Your sentence is made of of several incomplete sentences. It is very confusing, so I am not able to understand the exact point your trying to get across to your readers. Revise the sentence to say what you want people to hear. "KISS" Keep it simple silly.