How can I improve my writing skills in English? - Pls advise,comment on the way not on what is written. thanks

Question

English is not my mother tounge, Either sometime I go so formal while writing or use informal words and easy words. but it seems both doesn't work. An Example:
"As a law enforcement officer I would have put former president Saddam Hussain in Jail, as a soldier I would not have thought twice to pull the trigger and as a judge I would have given the same verdict as judge Abdul Raouf given according to the law in the light of evidence provided.As president Bush is wrong and imposed politically motivated war and responsible for many innocent life, said in many views, doesn't make Mr. Hussain innocent.and even "support of America for him before 1990" doesn't make him innocent. If he was involved, justice should be done. US people will do their own justice-"
The above para I wrote in BBC have your say which was not published, this is not the first time. I know I'm lacking somewhere to transform my thoughts into proper words.
moderation exp. http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/help/4180404.stm thx

Answer 1

"THE" judge Abdul Raouf "HAD" given
Justice shoud be "GO IN THE RIGHT WAY"
(it's not a homework you're gonna DO it )

actually, you're lacking the expressions, and some grammers and some common sense about the language itself.

Answer 2

As a law enforcement officer I would put former President Saddam Hussain in Jail. As a soldier, I would not think twice to pull the trigger and as a judge, I would have given the same verdict as judge Abdul Raouf given according to the law in the light of evidence provided. As for President Bush, he is wrong for this politically motivated war that is happening now. According to many views, President Bush is responsible for many innocent lives......... sorry i'd finish the rest of your article but have to go.....
hope this helps :o)

Answer 3

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